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Chapter Vierzehn part eins
Is Anderson a gallant knight? Can he recover Shan



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Hi there,

interesting piece that provokes the reader to think. Are we all robots, going through the motions of life or a predetermined programme of some sort, or is it that we are getting lost within a world increasingly disengaged and are being supplanted?

GMG


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I'm really enjoying this story. It's quite a romantic chapter this one. Told with the usual care and flowing beautifully. I'm taking note so that I can be better equips to write my own novel. PM


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Not sure what souvenir in your first line is. is it supposed to be souvenir?

You need to watch your spacing between sentences.

There are a few spelling issues scattered around this short piece which really interferes with the understanding and message of the piece.


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I liked the light tone of this and the enjambment between the earlier verses, an effect almost like taking a quick breath between parental tasks! It's a job that never ends. Our little ones are closing in on forty now and we still sometimes make the mistake of treating them as if they are still ten! However, now that we're beginning to get old and doddery, they are somewhat more forgiving of that than they used to be!


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Hi there,

There is a nice depth of feeling to this piece. Uniqueness exists all around us in many, many ways if we are only attuned to see it.

GMG


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