Okem Hollow Gazette
by Suzanna Ray
I'm not sure if I could come up with a story like this with no adjectives. Good for you for creating a clever use of famous names and institutions and a humorous read.
There are errors, but after seeing the comment you made at the end, I'm not sure if they're yours or the paper's, but if the latter, my apologies; if yours, maybe these suggestions will be useful. I almost suggested changing some of the lines from passive to active voice, but I hesitated. Passive voice is something poo-pooed by editors but sometimes works.
Mr. and Mrs. Charles Hilton of Upscale, New York
Need comma after "New York"
their daughter Paris Hilton -- their daughter, Paris Hilton,
Mud Hollow Virginia last Saturday July 18, 2020
Commas & extra space after "last"
Suggest: Mud Hollow, Virginia, last Saturday, July 18, 2020.
Brides Maids were dressed in gowns of Organza and the Bride wore a Tutu of lace embroidered with sequins and pearls.
"Bridesmaids" -- one word
Organza -- small "o"
Bride -- small "b"
Tutu -- small "t"
of " Tumbling Tumble Weeds ",
spacing & one word -- of "Tumbling Tumbleweeds,"
Carol Channing sang Ave Maria by Franz Schubert
Close extra spaces & quotes
Carol Channing sang "Ave Maria" by Franz Schubert
The Bride and Groom exchanged rings from The box of cigars from Havana Cuba, gifted to the groom by Fidel Castro.
No caps, comma, & extra space after "exchange"
The bride and groom exchanged rings from the box of cigars from Havana, Cuba, gifted to the groom by Fidel Castro.
Refreshments served following the nuptials consisted of Beans on Triskets. and Chicken Feet., roasted on the grill.
Extra spaces, caps, and extra period
Refreshments served followed the nuptials consisted of beans on Triskets and chicken feet, roasted on the grill.
Minuet in G -- quote marks
The more enibrated, were escorted from the premises by the National Guard unit 16 from Slickmore County and The Unknown Soldier from Arlington Virginia.
Misspelled word; commas
The more inebriated were escorted from the premises by the National Guard, Unit 16, from Slickmore County and the Unknown Soldier from Arlington, Virginia.
Comment Written by shaffer40 on 27-Jan-2020
Read and reviewed with blinders on.