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A Familiar Prayer by timesmistress

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Great work. Wonderful,subtle rhyming in the beginning.

My favorite part:

Let me be last, again
I pray
and we'll rise from the ashes
to love another day.

Couldn't find anything to criticize, although I like to do so.

Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written by TheScientist on 19-Nov-2006

Names by Paul de Fleury
Chapter 81 of the book His Own Petard

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Dear Paul de Fleury,

You are a great novelist for sure. Eight one chapters? It will be a long novel.

I've never seen a better description of a virus like:

"The attached Excel file had been booby-trapped, releasing a virus that short-circuited the pc power supply to send a surge of voltage through the mouse cable and into the operator."

Thanks for sharing and teaching us.
Comment Written by TheScientist on 19-Nov-2006

Can't Stand Your Shouting by nora arjuna
Chapter 5 of the book Personal Collection

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Dear Arjuna,

I usually don't write poetry. But I read some of of them to add harmony to my short stories. Your work was a good contribution.

Please keep writing and lighting us up.

And thank you for sharing your work with us.

Comment Written by TheScientist on 19-Nov-2006

Little Boy Blue Died by kajungurll
Chapter 3 of the book Heart To Heart

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No wonder your major is English. Your command of the language is exceptional in my view.

The ending sentence:

"The Town of Rhyme a place in the Everglades lost in time."

Was simply great.

Thanks for sharing and teaching us how to write a great poem.
Comment Written by TheScientist on 19-Nov-2006

England Lost by Rawice

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No wonder you are an other of the book:

"The Town of Rhyme a place in the Everglades lost in time"

Your rhyming is exceptional.

Flawless work. Please keep teaching us.

Appreciate your sharing.
Comment Written by TheScientist on 19-Nov-2006

The True Life of a Clown by UniversalWriter

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Very professional.

I really liked:

Sparkling colors
The perfect makeup

But my favorite part is:

Deep within
This clown
Feels so sad

Thank you for sharing your work.
Comment Written by TheScientist on 19-Nov-2006

Emma's Tea Party by Ageispanther

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You toy with words alright. And you form wonderful stories alright. At least I read one.

One of my favorites: "her bright-green eyes sparkled with delight."

Can't find anything to criticize, except perhaps:

"Look it, Mommy, this one is Oliver" perhaps needs a "," after Oliver, but this is very minor.

A great ending: "as they all collapsed with laughter in a heap with the puppies."
Comment Written by TheScientist on 19-Nov-2006

Robbie and the King by Ritsal

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I usually don't read scripts, but I made an exception, because you are Ritsal, and I'm a fan of yours. Flawless, errorless. I always learn from you.

Great dialogs and descriptions. One of my favorites starts with"

"The big fish thrashes and leaps, churning up the water."

Thanks for sharing. Thanks, as always.
Comment Written by TheScientist on 19-Nov-2006

Dracula's Party by rivki1111
Chapter 11 of the book Secrets from Forever

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What could I expect? Very professional again. I couldn't find anything to criticize. Like the first and last paragraphs most, especially the last. I also liked the sentence:

"You are one sexy vampire bride."

Congratulations.
Comment Written by TheScientist on 19-Nov-2006

Sweet to Sweet by easyeverett

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This the first poem I'm giving five starts, while it has no rhyming. I like the the first verse best.

Good piece of work. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written by TheScientist on 19-Nov-2006


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