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Dueling Ink by dejohnsrld (Debbie)

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Hahahahaha! Debbie, that was engaging and downright funny. It put me in a good mood just reading it. Sounds like it helped you generate a good mood for yourself, as well. We all benefit when Debbie writes. So keep it cranking.

Good luck in the contest.

Jay
Comment Written by Jay Squires on 21-Nov-2018

Paradise Found by suep

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This poem should do well in the contest. I didn't know until the last few lines that your loved one had passed. Was that intentional? It was a good effect. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written by Jay Squires on 20-Nov-2018

Is It Worth It? by Heaven Calvert

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I like this story, Heaven. Tender, feisty, innocent. I don't know how old the characters are. I'm assuming they are adults, but there is a childlike innocence in their dialogue. Good luck with the contest. I say that with some reservation, since I have an entry in it, too. LOL.
Comment Written by Jay Squires on 20-Nov-2018

Lorraine by Thomas Bowling

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Ah-ha! So it is biography. Non Fiction. Their entire life seems like prayer answered. You sound close to Marshall and Loraine. Correct? The hardest part to imagine was how Scott could pry his teeth loose. Someone should have shown him how to use a pair of pliers. Seriously, though, that was amazing. Good reading your stuff again, Thomas.
Comment Written by Jay Squires on 20-Nov-2018

Trust by Krissy Johnson

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Reads almost like a Koan. Very strong Asian feel to it. If you've ever read the I Ching (book of Changes),you'd know the feeling I have reading your poem. Quite powerful. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written by Jay Squires on 20-Nov-2018

Around the Block by Y. M. Roger

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What a fascinating little poem. You capture the feeling of fey so well here, especially with the whispering of the third line of each stanza. Good job. I hope you do well in the contest.
Comment Written by Jay Squires on 20-Nov-2018

Filled With Screams by William Ross

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Good poem with strong, cogent points, William. Everyone can relate to your theme. It is a sense of free-flowing fear we all fear. The other day, I went to Denny's (Veterans Day) and found myself looking around my booth. If someone had come bursting through the door with an automatic rifle he'd have us all like fish in a bowl. Really makes it hard to enjoy a Grand Slam!
Comment Written by Jay Squires on 20-Nov-2018

I Wasn't Weak by victor 66

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Whoa! Some pretty poignant dialogue there. And--being dialogue only--I guess it would have to be. Anyone who is married has a touchpoint with your story. It's all too common a complaint ... though usually with the woman's complaint being the husband never listens. Yours was an interesting reversal. Good luck on the contest.
Comment Written by Jay Squires on 20-Nov-2018

Tears of Regret by Sasha

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This is taut, real and GOOD, Sasha. I think you have a winner here. I didn't even realize it was "dialogue only" until near the end. That's a sign of smoothness. Wow! Good luck.
Comment Written by Jay Squires on 20-Nov-2018

Sunday Sermon--Diner Style by humpwhistle

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Up to your usual good writing, Lee. And not an easy task when it's dialogue only. You kept everything taut and moving forward, witty and with a satisfying end.

Great job. I entered the same contest so you'll understand why I come up less than effulgent in my well-wishes, LOL.
Comment Written by Jay Squires on 20-Nov-2018


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