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Janilou

short story - S - by phill doran

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That is a LOT OF S WORDS!! Lol This was very entertaining to read. It must have taken you a long time. It is great. I didn't even try to look for errors. I'm sure there aren't any!
All the best,
Jan
Comment Written by Janilou on 16-Feb-2020

Yuri flies towards Nairobi by Alchera

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I was a little confused. But that could be me of course. Is this going to be a novel or is it a stand alone story?

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caressing her butt with (maternal) love and she tenderly melted at his kisses, slipping along

Maternal usually means pertaining to mother or motherhood. This is a man caressing her so I wasn't sure if the use of the word "maternal" was a typo?

All the best
Jan
Comment Written by Janilou on 16-Feb-2020

Life in Paradise by Bill Pinder
Chapter 3 of the book Dalton's World

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"Just peachy. Guess it's time for my head shrinking."

"I love that sense of humor. Follow me to my office."

I feel like a dog heading to the vet to be neutered.


Hahahaha. Loved these lines.

A very interesting chapter. I had no trouble following along. Dialogue seemed appropriate for doctor-patient interactions.

All the best,
Jan
Comment Written by Janilou on 15-Feb-2020

A perfect name... by royowen

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Your hands they hold entrusted keys ,
and with those keys true treasures seize.

What a fabulous and wonderful poem and when I read it is a tribute to a lovely person you know for their birthday, well, that made it even better!

Thank you so much for writing such beautiful poems, Roy.

Jan
Comment Written by Janilou on 14-Feb-2020

Thoughts, Words, And Habits by Sandra du Plessis
Chapter 124 of the book Daily Blessings from God

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A fine poem that reminds us who holds the power to change our hearts, our minds and our souls. He does have the power, and He freely gives us the ability to accept His love and His gifts if we trust Him.
Well written. No errors found.
All the best,
Jan
Comment Written by Janilou on 06-Feb-2020

Political Follies by Elizabeth Emerald

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A very interesting three-way point of view indeed. I just shake my head every time the current president speaks. That's all I'm going to say about that.
But I sure hope America has learned her lesson. We shall see. As you said, the answer is blowing in the wind!
All the very best. This was good.
Jan
Comment Written by Janilou on 06-Feb-2020

These Golden Years by damommy

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What a delightful poem that took me right along with you down memory lane. I loved it. So many years have gone by for me too, but unfortunately, I do not yet have the luxury of sitting and relaxing in my garden. So I will ask you to do it for me! Enjoy.
All the best,
Jan
Comment Written by Janilou on 06-Feb-2020

Wide open by Colin Lowley

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A very cute poem and great photos. My daughter likes to do this too. She took a photo of me filtered to appear as a guy and I looked so much like my brother it was freaky!
Reminds me of my mother telling my sister to stop pouting in case the wind changed and she got stuck like that. LOL
I enjoyed the poem. And the photos.
All the best.
Jan
Comment Written by Janilou on 06-Feb-2020

He Can Talk In Silence by elpsog

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I am making a promise to myself to start journaling again.
As well as my writing time.

This was very interesting and comforting too. Of course, sometimes it is so important to sit in silence and listen to Him.

When reaching for mo journal in which I write

Did you mean to type 'mo' or 'my' here?

All the best,
Jan
Comment Written by Janilou on 06-Feb-2020

Reprieve by Cindy Decker

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This one sent shivers through me. We visited Washington D.C. last year and went to the Holocaust Museum. Chilling and so sad, but so important to see, I do believe. Your photo and poem reminded me of that visit.
I wish you all the very best in the 15 syllable poem contest.
Jan
Comment Written by Janilou on 06-Feb-2020


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