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Immortality by Veenbee

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A clear-speaking essay and I would agree with all you said. I think the average person, though, especially those not familiar with Christian theology would find this difficult. But thanks for writing. Let's see more. Mark Littleton
Comment Written by mlittleton on 14-Jan-2016

Warriors by Barb Hensongispsaca
Chapter 59 of the book World As I See It 4

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I like the poem about war and soldiers. However, I disagree with your premise that that such warriors go to Paradise. But that's just my religion speaking. Anyway, you might send it to some of the mags on the Internet. Mark Littleton
Comment Written by mlittleton on 14-Nov-2015
Read and reviewed with blinders on.

Love Eternal (katauta) by happykat4

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I like these. Very warm, very personal. I think you have something good here and with the explanation it really works. You might send this out to some mags on the Internet. Mark Littleton
Comment Written by mlittleton on 14-Nov-2015

Christmas law by dmt1967

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Nice poem. Good message. Something we can all take to heart, though I think it's futile until the kingdom of God comes among us. But that's my religion speaking. I really think you've captured it about the times in which we live. So it's a good start. I would send it to some of the on-line poetry mags. Mark Littleton
Comment Written by mlittleton on 14-Nov-2015

Sisters are for life by dmt1967

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Wow, what a story. A little like Romeo and J, but with some twists. I don't know what I'd do with this. You might try to get it into an online mag. There are many out there and some would do semi-horror like this. Mark Littleton
Comment Written by mlittleton on 14-Nov-2015

30 - Walking with God by MizKat

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nice rhyme in the poetry. Good instruction. The AABB structure was a little jarring, but I got used to it toward the end. I think you've done a good job with this. You might try PURPOSE magazine to submit to. They do poetry like this. Mark Littleton
Comment Written by mlittleton on 14-Nov-2015

The Seductive Black by lalajovanoski

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Interesting poem. Not sure I could understand what it was about. but it was worth reading to the end. I think you have a deft way with words and that you could probably get things like this published on the Internet. Mark Littleton
Comment Written by mlittleton on 30-Oct-2015

Falling in Love by TheNecklace
Chapter 9 of the book The Necklace- The Dusky Club 1962

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DO you really think this is true love -- no commitments, no real sense of going on together? I liked reading it. It was sensual and erotic, but not the kind of love I like reading about. Anyway, keep on with it. But make it real and lasting so that the reader can invest in something worthwhile. Mark Littleton
Comment Written by mlittleton on 30-Oct-2015

Halloween by zanya

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I like the rhymes and the whimsicalness of the poem. Nicely framed. Should be publishable on the Internet. You could easily make this longer, but maybe no necessary. I like it a lot. Mark Littleton
Comment Written by mlittleton on 30-Oct-2015

Buddha by el twelve

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Don't know whether you mean "illusion" or "d'illusion". The first would go along with Buddhist belief. The second, I'm not sure. It's not a bad poem. Perhaps a little simplistic, but the quick read is enjoyable.
Mark Littleton
Comment Written by mlittleton on 28-Oct-2015


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