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The Ties That Binds by larry conner

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Your poem has an interesting title.

you have a few grammatical errors and spelling errors.

For example, festen is spelled wrong. Another is "Who know" should be who knows.

What is the last two words suppose to say? "shes saids" - doesn't make sense.

Please go back & read over your poem.

Also, what about a picture?

Good luck in your writing.
Comment Written by Mari_ on 15-Mar-2012

Weep Not by adewpearl

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Your poem brings hope that soon we will see some beautiful flowers! My fav:

Weep not for beauty's sad demise,
for soon the earth will yield her prize

Bravo! Great job as usual!
Comment Written by Mari_ on 03-Feb-2012

But she will by elliejean

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Wow!! What a beautiful poem!

Two lives that the met and loved. 30 wonderful years.

I love the repetition of the lines But she will, he will and I will. They really elevate the poem.

Thank you for sharing this portion of your life in this poem.
Comment Written by Mari_ on 01-Oct-2011

Loving You Is by cercie
Chapter 17 of the book Say It With A Poem

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Loving you is

I like how you repeated that line.

Very nice tribute to your husband. I hope he enjoyed reading it.

Great job.
Comment Written by Mari_ on 28-Sep-2011

Contemplations by BigTomNY

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We often contemplate things we would never do.

A nice entry into the Acrostic Poetry contest.

Pain exists in all I feel,
Laughing, I wonder, is this real?

Like these two lines together. Great job!
Comment Written by Mari_ on 27-Sep-2011

For My One True Love by BigTomNY

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BigTomNY I hope you are doing well.

Your poem was delightful and made me even chuckle. It's funny how sometimes I notice men write a love poem and will put that little "umph" in there, lol ya know, the sex. Women will write a love poem most times about smells and feelings and flowers and trees.

Besides the umph, I liked this line too:

"I loved watching her shadow,"

Very nice! Congratulations on a such a long and true marriage.
Comment Written by Mari_ on 25-Sep-2011

What is the difference? by misscookie
Chapter 49 of the book Passage to one's thoughts

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Amen.

There is a difference Miss cookie.

Now the question is which one does one get more enjoyment out of?

An open question with many answers.
Comment Written by Mari_ on 25-Sep-2011

Lovesong by bulbul

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Aww Grandma, what a sweet sweet poem about loving your little baby grandaughter.

With the change of only one line I see (the one that says 'little angel') this could easily be a poem about any love for anyone, big or small. I love making some of my poetry faceless.

Great job.
Comment Written by Mari_ on 25-Sep-2011

Awe-inspiring Peach by Thelonewolf

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ok wow at first I thought just a peeping tom. But then I realized you were inside the room!

This poem is sensual but creepy! I'll make sure my curtains are drawn and shades pulled.

Very descriptive and good writing, even if it gives me the willys lol.

Comment Written by Mari_ on 21-Sep-2011

Strigon by Violet Demise

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"The priest lowered his eyes as he continued to sprinkle the holly water ahead of himself."

I think you mean 'holy' water

I like this little story! I learned a new word: strigon.

So very descriptive. I feel like I was right along beside this woman from the village of Kringa. I feel like, however, your ending is lacking. It almost feels like you just gave up. You should of ended it differently with another tale of goings on in the village. Or simply end it with her "crying in the sheets once shared with this strigon". Since this is a word limit piece, I think I prefer the later. I think that would of been more dramatic also to end it like that. Great job, good luck in the contest.
Comment Written by Mari_ on 21-Sep-2011
Read and reviewed with blinders on.


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