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Very descriptive, how wonderful that we have that promise of a new beginning. Presentation was great. There was feeling in the lines,the freshness of newly mowed grass blue skies. Everyone has been taken away by these. I liked swell the heart. Good job!

Comment Written by meb42 on 04-May-2010

No Coloreds Allowed by seewhatimwritingnow

Excellent

Betty, You show so much talent. Yes we are all happy that we can accept each race as who we are. There was so much meaning in so few words. Rhythm kept the reader looking for the next beat. I am happy I choose to read your poem.

Comment Written by meb42 on 04-May-2010

The sky is falling by hoopinzero
Chapter 1 of the book Suicide Man

Excellent

Wow1 The more reviews I read the better they get. This is so descriptive and well written. I am not an editor so I miss all those little tenses. I do now when a writer is flowing with an idea or painting a picture with words. You displayed such drama and your characters were brought to life. Great read

Comment Written by meb42 on 03-May-2010

Vanderpoop by RobinWrites
Chapter 39 of the book The Dream Seeker

Excellent

This was a nice story. a daughter talking to her grandmother. This would attract a ten to twelve year old audience. After that they do not have much time for grandmother. The story had a feel of this age. I like to read stories with a good ending. This is my anticipation when I read, that the story will give closure. You accomplished this in your story.

Comment Written by meb42 on 02-May-2010

Dream Whispers Prologue by K. L. Bauman
Prologue of the book Dream Whispers

Excellent

Great imagination, The story kept my interest and made me forget that the writer was just dreaming. Good presentation. The story was very descriptive. I liked a breeze whispered softly. Music void of words but filled with supernatural intensity. This was a great description of music.

Comment Written by meb42 on 02-May-2010

Songs In The Seasons Of Life by vickib

Excellent

How beautiful and sweet. This writing seems to come from the soul. The bad time we have seem to go away when we keep a song in our heart. A beautiful presentation in words.

Comment Written by meb42 on 02-May-2010

A City Boy by Readywriter52

Excellent

I loved this story. Some abusive stories do not have a happy ending. More people need to wite on abuse. I am so happy someone took a stand against abuse. The public used a man's abuse as protecting his family for a long time. There was a lot of meaning in this story. Maybe someone needs this hope to get out of abuse.

Comment Written by meb42 on 29-Apr-2010

Love of a lifetime by IanC
Chapter 12 of the book Mobius Collection

Excellent

This is a beautiful love poem, I like the connection between two people in love. Finding my heart,soul,friend, mate you. Beautiful words to speak to someone you love. Spirit to soul connect very deep. This must happen to keep a marriage alive. Great love poem.

Comment Written by meb42 on 29-Apr-2010

New Whore by Fish

Good

Sad for the whore and her partner. The poem was borderline x-rated. It must be bad for someone remembering this scene. She hides her mind in inner-space. I see her as some mothers child needing love. Alone, once more, I feel complete. Some mothers son needing to feel loved. Sad poem!

Comment Written by meb42 on 29-Apr-2010

Don't think I'll comb my hair today by seewhatimwritingnow

Excellent

This is so beautiful and thoughtful. The poem has such melody, that you could almost sing this. I know so many people who think, I don't think I will comb my hair today. I worked in a nursing home many years. I saw so much sadness. I am glad she had a computer. I am retired and I enjoy my computer. I will continue to follow your writings. You have so much talent.

Comment Written by meb42 on 29-Apr-2010