by Marcus Miller
Hello, Marcus - a well written story - but might I suggest you
Insert a double space between each paragraph to improve on
presentation, which will also make it easier to read.
And perhaps divide that 3rd para as it is overly long.
I could saddle up the Hoover[,] and start sucking - comma not needed
Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written by Margaret Snowdon on 08-Jul-2019