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Relatively Speaking by djsaxon

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You should take a collection of your humorous poetry to a publisher my friend! I reckon this is the sort of stuff the Australian public needs to read, and has probably longed for, considering the sort of shite that's around these days regards humorous poetry. Or any poetry.

How totally impolite that no-one brought a plate! Presumably they brought their own liquid refreshment, or did they rely on the bar being stocked and open to one and all??

Loved the reference to ants and mandibles without lube...hahahaha, that's beautiful! And no transferred bug to bar the hug or peck upon the cheek...PRECIOUS!!

And they're coming back next week? Methinks it may be time for you to take a short trip or plan a very long nap that day...

Thanks for the consistent entertainment! LOVE YOUR WORK!
Comment Written by Gypsymooncat on 08-Nov-2020

Lest We Forget by djsaxon

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So, your sonnet-style poem is a plea Lest We Forget. A pair of very thickly coated red lips herald the poem. Red lips in a pose of uncertainty...or discomfiture. Not sure which.

THEN your last line...

Yes, what did our fallen boys fight for? A world gone past the ridiculous, and on another revolution past sublime again? Indeed, celebrate the dead by never forgetting them, but let's also not forget to respect the living. Even a sweet transvestite from transexual...PENNSYLVANIA-a-a...THANK YOU PENNSYLVANIA...for sweet transvestites, and those luvveryly college votes...

LET THE CIRCUS BEGIN as the loser tries to stir the setting pot.

UPDATE: It appears the swing votes came from the streets of Philadelphia...ain't no angel gonna greet him, it's just him and his hand...he walked a thousand miles for that orange skin...
Comment Written by Gypsymooncat on 07-Nov-2020

The Morning Of The Girth by djsaxon

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Oh this is precious! I love the relativity to apes, or should I say, gorillas in the mist, but belly is as belly does, a growing juggernaut AND THEN you go on to say 90 pounds to go and you get to see your dick. There...I actually typed it how it appears in your poem, no * or ____ nope, I bravely sweared out loud on this rather family site in order to quote you verbatim.

So many words rhyme with it, too, like
Nick
Sick
Pick
Mick
Brick
Stick
Lick
AND LAST BUT NOT LEAST
Prick

But I digress. You clinched it with that last line. I have to say, the whole poem is funny, but that ending line makes it hysterical. And historical.

This poem goes in the pool room!
Comment Written by Gypsymooncat on 07-Nov-2020

The perfect home... by royowen

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I agree with every word Roy. As charity begins at home, so does the foundation of every nation. Like attracts like, and a majority of broken, dysfunctional homes will equate to a broken and dysfunctional country.

It's sad that you, and me, take the view that it's a pipe dream to hope that a stable home life based on love and high moral and ethical standards forms the basis for a better country, rather than the division and dysfunction we're seeing at government level today. The latter should not be the new norm.
Comment Written by Gypsymooncat on 05-Nov-2020

Toby the Chimney Sweep by sandramitchell

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This is a truly wonderful poem, and definitely deserving of Poem of the Month status. Congratulations on that achievement!

It's a great thing to pull out old poems and rework them; in fact I like that more than writing one from scratch. It'd be interesting to see your original version of this, but then again, if we kept every version of every poem, the stacks of paper would reach to the ceiling lol!

Again, this was an exceptional piece of poetry and I enjoyed it thoroughly xoxoxox
Comment Written by Gypsymooncat on 04-Nov-2020

Ain't No need To Vote by djsaxon

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Oh, you're so right my ginger choc chewing choku writer friend! Have had some sav blanc and pain killers, so won't make much sense methinks...

Biden leads overall (according to counts I've seen), but those College votes are a worry, especially Florida.

WTF do swing votes even exist?

Ah, fuggedaboudit...let's have another chug and a durrie and worry about it tomorra. Spoken like a true ginnie girl. And proud of it!

Bleh...and meh...

It'll be what it'll be.

Comment Written by Gypsymooncat on 04-Nov-2020

Write On by jaybird1

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And don't stop writing, because your contributions on here would be very sadly missed.

It is an uplifting thing to do: to create a poem from a few words or lines and see it grow. Poets are after all, artists by virtue of words.

Thanks for sharing this lovely and thoughtful poem with us xoxoxox
Comment Written by Gypsymooncat on 03-Nov-2020

Mute by Charley Lake

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I think we suffer more for doing "what's right" rather than following our own heartfelt desire. We miss out. Everything's a risk, isn't it?

I enjoyed your poem which brought to my mind the thoughts expressed above. While we remain in our silent hell, wondering what might've been, we question if we did the right thing for us. I'd say we didn't.

Well said xoxoxoxo
Comment Written by Gypsymooncat on 03-Nov-2020

Not a Brighter Day by Roxanna Andrews

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As a concerned Australian, I wait to see what the final votes will show. Like you, we're anxious here too.

This contribution of yours is very timely and probably will engender a lot of head-nods and thought from those who read and review.

Thanks for sharing your concerns with us here! I think anyone who has any intelligence is wondering how America can withstand yet more limitations, control and bloody-mindedness than it's already endured.

Here's hoping that America is made great again through common sense and popular vote!
Comment Written by Gypsymooncat on 03-Nov-2020

The Plea by djsaxon

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Hmm, this is a very sobering piece you've offered up today.

You have a way of wording things that is simple but very effective, and this shines brightly in your ending couplet. Presumably this isn't autobiographical, as such, although I'd say it's been written from life experience and/or observation. I think you've captured the troubled soul's plea here, and managed to add that bit of religion that is what anyone facing death would ask for (I'm guessing that bit).

This is very well done and another very thought-provoking piece my fine friend.

(I see that I got in while it's still paying more than 1 point and 2 cents YAY lol!)
Comment Written by Gypsymooncat on 03-Nov-2020


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