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This work has reached the exceptional level

Bravo, bravo, bravo! I know you care not for such bravado, but this is exceptional, deep, moving, emotive. I am truly without words.

I am giving you a six and content and exceptional emotional writing. There are a few punctuational issues but it should never cost you for the incredible talent and soul you have.

Wow!

Jimi

Comment Written by jlsavell on 19-Feb-2021
Read and reviewed with blinders on.

Bipolar can be fun... by Possummagic

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Possumagic,

I applaud you for your courage in writing about your struggles.

With honesty and integrity, you empower this piece to come alive and allow others to walk in your shoes.

I have written many pieces on depression and the black dog which is part and parcel of your bi polar.

Please keep sharing.
I have other works Id like to share with you- pm me- if you'd like to read and tell me if there are others you'd like me to read.

Comment Written by jlsavell on 16-Feb-2021

Gone! by kiwisteveh

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Plus **************. What more can I say?
Well, I do believe you are a master of free verse regardless of topic.

Exceptionally cohesive, insightful, inventive without straying from subject matter. Flowed beautifully.

Bravo. I am probably more happy than you are!

Jimi

Comment Written by jlsavell on 21-Jan-2021

Aussie Christmas by Aussie

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Dearest Kace,

Here I am again!

I love your work and your incredible enthusiasm, plus your wisdom. You are one of the kindest, most incredible and talented souls I know.

Life is beginning to return to normal here, after two catastrophic hurricanes back to back. It has been endless days of rebuilding and cleaning and there is still much work to be done.

Life has been a struggle for many here. First COVID, job loss, then hurricane Laura which destroyed even more business, then Delta. It was crazy! People are truly suffering.

But enough is enough. Your poem is light and whimsical. A much need break from the astronomically politically crazy climate today. But I am very emotionally calm now that the election is past and dignity will be restored back to our democracy and the White House.

Keep writing dear friend, keep writing.

Your fan

Jimi

Comment Written by jlsavell on 13-Nov-2020

The Long Nightmare by MissMerri

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Adonna, your poem was a delightful read even though we have complete differences in opinion regarding the President.

I've never known you to succumb to political except in private conversations, where you no doubt know where I stand.

After I voted, I went to my daughter in Dallas. My daughter and her two daughters were filled with anxiety. These are two young beautiful women who will be the future. They share my same ideologies. One was old enough to vote and she was so very proud. Both can hold their own in any debate.

I have never been more affected in emotions and convictions, then I have with this election and the present administration, whom I am extremely ashamed of and very relieved his term is up.

I know you wanted a different outcome, and that is perfectly fine with me. Politics and religion should never ever come between friends. Emotional maturity allows diverse opinions without causing division. I can honestly say, you and I have had many conversations over the years regarding this a President.,

With all this being said- you have such an incredible talent as a word artist. You execute perfection each and every time. You are incredibly attentive to detail in all areas of poetic devices. I have learned much from you. This was a long wonderful tale-( I believe another first from you in length). Truly, I thoroughly enjoyed, even to the end. Truly.

I was a bit puzzled as to why a Halloween poem now. Why didn't you post it in the Halloween contest, but my question was answered at the end.

Hope you are doing well. We will talk soon. Adore your work. Perfect as always.

Jimi

Comment Written by jlsavell on 13-Nov-2020

reply by the author on 16-Nov-2020

Jimi, I thank you so much for reading this way-long poem and for writing an equally long review. You seemed surprised I seemed to be expressing publicly a political view, but I can't imagine anyone being shocked to learn I have opinions too. I don't mind (as you must know) expressing how I feel and think, even knowing I will encounter many who disagree, plus a few who think I must be incredibly ignorant. At my age, I see no reason to care what people think about me. "To my own Master, I must stand... or fall." He is the only One who matters to me. I actually enjoy conversations that present different points of view. I think it is healthy for all of us to consider other points of view and to remain open-minded. Thanks again for stopping by. I don't get this from you very often. Thank you especially for the six stars. A generous surprise. ;p MM

reply by jlsavell on 16-Nov-2020

Yes, I am surprised, indeed, that you posted a political view through Fanstory, being that we have talked at length before.

I don?t think anyone is surprised you have an opinion, I certainly hope you do! In fact I know you do!

In a democracy, we are free to express our belief system and react to things which don?t align with our thoughts or beliefs.

I have found that, as I stated before, emotionally mature people respect others view points and can disagree.

The caveat, often, is when their viewpoints are based on misinformation or misleading information- then I see no harm, whatsoever, in inquiring as to where such information came from. It is when the exchange becomes antagonistic which is uncalled for. Discussion and true research is for setting matters straight and holding fast to what is fine.

Divisiveness and hatred is happening too much today. Much to much. The misinformation and hatred can only be quelled at the highest level from whence it came. We live in volatile times and it gets more dangerous everyday.

To be fair, people from all walks of life, right-left- are part and parcel of this chaos. It is disingenuous and actually quite unfair and unproven to blame only one side as the instigator of ill will and causing all the commotion. However, I do believe in a heartbeat, that racist and bigots and white Supremacist
are a lot unto their own. But these people initiate hate and division, and they have a long litany of historical proof.

It was an exceptional poem. I would never grade anyone on their political views even if their work didn?t deserve accolades on the writing. I reviewed because I was in my messages and you popped up. I had time. I?ve always enjoyed your poetry and yes, have never read anything political from you, so I was surprised.,

As I said, you and I will always differ politically, it is nothing new. We differ on a lot of things. But it doesn?t stop me from appreciating and valuing your friendship.

My sons and I have polar opposite views on politics-and we have intense discussions. But we have a deep respect for each other. Because we are emotionally nature and I am extremely proud of them for this. Cannot say it for a lot of people I have had the misfortune of knowing.

Yes, dear Adonna, we are all entitled to our opinions- thank goodness- but as the saying goes- we are not entitled to make up facts. So many do.

In fact I believe OBama stated that sadly today we are bombarded with two differences of given information given as facts. This is what causes civil unrest and divisiveness. ( That was paraphrased.)

I don?t think anyone views you as incredibly ignorant- not by a long shot.

It doesn?t matter if they disagree with you or not. It shouldn?t matter at any age. What matters is to agree to disagree and keep respect in tact. A magnificent part of the equation of a thing called democracy.

Seek to understand and then be understood . Tact and deliver. People are more apt to listen to your beliefs and ideas if you do not approach offensively, which initiates an instant defense.

Listening with intent is a learned art form that so few people know. You? ve always listened with intent with our lengthy discussions as I hope I have reciprocated like etiquette.

Have a great evening. I do care what those within my circle of influence think of me. May I always be able to prove myself worthy of their friendship and interest. As for the rest of the world, my reputation is important as I do not ever want to be a stumbling block to someone I might gave the humble honor of influencing. However, I can?t become deflated if someone chooses to dislike me. It?s probably for the best and it?s their issue not mine. I think you may agree.

Steam by YNWA

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YNWA,

Well, well, I'm awestruck. Free verse to me is a phenomenal way of writing such a seductive, emotional, and truly human experience. Incredible.
You've got me beat. I truly have to bookcase this. Wow! Too many exquisite and eloquent original lines to list. Your poetic skills are admired.

Your fan
Jimi

Comment Written by jlsavell on 05-Oct-2020

The Dogs of War by Aussie

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Good morning sweet Kace,

As one of the United States closest allies, or at least was at one time, your nation has lost so much courageously and selflessly having our backs. I ask you- how many people recognize this.

Your poem is a stark and grave reminder of what we as a nation are sowing here in the United States. I have recommended and even urged people to read An Illustrated a History of the Gestapo. It is chilling and foreboding and the scene Hitler set is very nearly parallel to the scene Trump is setting. Of course, the Gestapo or storm troopers were well established before he came into power. Shall we not also forget Mussolini and Stalin.

If he is re- elected, as he was dishonestly elected in 2016- read Targeted- I'm afraid our democracy will be completely destroyed and it will be to the delight of Putin, Kim, and Xi, along with Iran.

Still, there are those who will sink their teeth and their flesh into anyone who dares to criticize their savior( Trump). There are many here on Fanstory as was noted in the political forum. Don't be fooled by fake friends- that is my motto anyway.

Contrary to what many so called pseudo Christians believe, the God of Christianity did not put this demon in office anymore than he put Hitler or Stalin, or Mussolini, or Kim or Putin in office. He allowed them to reign, simply because man in all his pride and arrogance across the world did not want to be ruled by the righteousness and firmness of the biblical God. They wanted to rule themselves, so he allowed them. For in time it will prove mankind's folly and downfall.

Anyone who supports this man is not only a blind fool but to me.

In my opinion, there are only three, possibly four kinds of people who support this imbecile.

1. The gathered masses who have deep seated and deeply rooted feelings of superiority toward other races.
2. Those who identify with staunch Republican values regardless of whether he truly represents those values or whether the GOP does- these people just identify with the name.
3. All those who are easily swayed and thrive on conspiracy theories.
4. Those who truly, truly, are not educated enough, nor do they want to be, to see and understand our democracy is at stake, they just think he's some down to earth guy who has their well being at heart. True ignorance.

And then we have

Also, far right wing evangelicals who are so indoctrinated which creates highly toxic and unwavering judgements of condemnation of social issues their God deems as a sin.

The great partisan divide in our country is killing us. It will be the greatest falter in our demise.

So called Republicans and Democrats alike are so engrossed in turf wars and staunch ideologies, they have lost track and a sense of who they represent and why. I could go on and on.

Thank you for posting, though I'm not sure if you were alluding to the United States.

You see in our country, we are so inundated with our national news and headlines, we as a compendium of people fail to realize there are other democracies out in the small world who operate with the same or many concerns we have. Also, since we are one of the most powerful nations in the world, our decisions and our issues affect the world inna most profound and life altering way. We are that huge mammoth elephant who can roll over the smaller creatures instead of protecting them with our might.

Thank you for sharing. A wonderful verse with a strong message. This the six. I don't critique on form. I'm not expert enough to do so, but I am an expert of what I believe.

Your friend, distant and often preoccupied

Jimi

Comment Written by jlsavell on 01-Oct-2020

My Endless Thoughts by MissMerri

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Adonna,

I will never know what inspires you to write such eloquence which touches every human heart on the most complex but simple level.

I cannot critique on form. I'm far from any expert on anything poetic or prose, but when the essence of a poem captures the true essence of what it is to journey through life in all its facets, the poet demonstrates the height, depth, and breath of an empath.
Bravo.

Your friend always

Jimi

Comment Written by jlsavell on 25-Sep-2020

2020? I've had Plenty! by kiwisteveh

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Hi Steve, how are you?

Well hopefully here in the USA come November 3rd, we will flush the turd. Lol, I saw that on his twitter feed. Hysterical.

I just finished Woodard's Book ' Rage'
I finished Crimes and Misdemeanors- The Trump Administration.

Next on to Bolton's Book- Behind Closed Doors.

Everyone should read Rage- Democrat- Republican and in between.

Perhaps you are not referring to the USA, but it hits home.

Have a great day!
Jimi

Comment Written by jlsavell on 25-Sep-2020

To Be Your Man (sweet pursuit) by Richard J

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Well, well sultry handsome man,
what woman could not fall into the arms of someone who not only writes with such sublime passion, but expresses such transparency and vulnerability to his lover( hopefully).
Incredibly sensuous, delicate, an ethereal poetic expression of life and love.

You must win this contest because I am sure you have won the heart of your woman. She'd be a fool to not savor this.

Thank you for sharing you with us.,

Your forever fan
MDOH
Jimi

Comment Written by jlsavell on 30-Jun-2020