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Could This Be by victortouche

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Who she be fallin from the trees?
Beautiful sweet feelings to relieve your dangling heart. I like how you untangled the knots enough to examine how your heart and head are connected. What I want to know is which one is telling the truth? Maybe true love never needs to be dissected. The older I get the more protected mine become. I find that a loss of the freedom I used to happily and innocently fly on. Sucks Doug! Sucks!
So nice to see a poem from you. You're alive and kicking rocks! Keep going even if your toes are bleeding a little.
XOV
Comment Written by vickib on 10-Nov-2020

Pennywise by victortouche

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I'm b a c k! Lol!
I don't like scary and don't watch scary and your clown isn't too scary despite some of your reviews. (Not that I snoop, but I do.) As always you give food for thought. I love the poem for that reason. It made me space out thinking about how paintings speak to you but don't talk back, like my grandfather giving me the evil eye without saying a word. I see me in that painting putting my lipstick on thicker and farther after every drink thinking I look prettier and prettier then lighting up a smoke thinking I'm too cool. She's red queen to me. Love her, Lol! Look out Doug my brain is coming back to life after 3 1/2 months of IV treatments, 1 month to go, so I joined FS again to try my hand again, maybe.
Nice work all the way around. Love that you're poems have your art work, I love studying the art to see your soul. Don't be so impatient!
XO
Vicki
Comment Written by vickib on 14-Aug-2020

Breakfast with Cary & Suzanne by humpwhistle

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Now this feels more like a real Valentine's Day scenario. This is true love here. (And I see what you mean now Ballentine, I'm clairvoyant or something, yeah I know or something, see I'm reading your mind.)
Laughed my ass off all the way and I appropriately loved the sweet last two sentences between them too.

Happy Valentines Day Lee, so I'm late, what's new?

XO
Vicki

This is not really a review its a six star fun read in my book.
Comment Written by vickib on 17-Feb-2016

Liver for Breakfast by humpwhistle

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Nice picture Lee. My goodness is there some thought in this. Nothing waisted. In words and in means. I have to admit I read your reviews, something I don't normally do, but I had so many different thoughts about this situation that I wanted to see if it was black and white and I'm just a creative thinker who can't decide what's black and white. Thank you btw because every paragraph made me imagine or think. So you say black humor is what you were going for, (I'll look that up later, seeing how I don't know the term.) well then, I like it. It seemed more philosophical. Does make one think just how far they'd go to stay alive, and at what cost. You know like later shopping the meat isle seeing a special on liver. Just so you know I've decided I'd rather eat my hand off. Wait, maybe I'd rather just go out in the snow and write a haiku in it like; seasoned meat-cheap, or frozen to the bone-dead of Winter.
I know, I didn't expect the lil guy to do it, you set me up, but I know your writing and you'd never let me bait my own hook.
Super! Hope you win.
Vicki
Oh and at least I know now Bible is spelled with a capital B and why you spelt devil divil, and I was wondering, geez you'd have to be Irish to get that deal. Right? Now I'm confused is I used spelled and spelt right.
Comment Written by vickib on 18-Sep-2015

Diagnosis: Mixed Up by humpwhistle

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That was hysterical. Let's see who could play these two parts? Al Bundy and Peg? You have the knack and down pat. I'm going to laugh when I have a hot flash instead of crying now. That means at least 20 times a day. Thank you!
Good luck in the contest. Great entry.
Sticky Vicki
Comment Written by vickib on 31-Aug-2015
Read and reviewed with blinders on.

tanka (evening's cool breeze) by Taffspride

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Oh my gosh Ann what a beautiful imperial court tanka. Courtly elegance. Knowing that these are secret notes between lovers I read into it even more and almost blushed. I just love it. The closing is awesome. This has all the qualities I look for in Japanese poetry and you're not even Japanese. I didn't realize you and Alvin were in the middle of this when he died. He'd be very happy Ann. One of my ICT was nominated poem of the month once, no one really understood the form that well I don't think. I hope this makes it there too. If it does, add notes to explain it more so people know the secret and form better.
I think you have an extra space between the second and third verse but maybe that's a pause and it's not a big deal just me.
So glad I didn't miss this.

XO Vicki
Comment Written by vickib on 28-Aug-2015

The Replacement by humpwhistle

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Wow! Like the way you told that. I'd never thought about being stuck with a no clue guy. But then again if I was a guy I'd be as green as him too. The best lessons I've ever learned are from the strongest people but they pissed me off so bad I didn't learn how important they were until it was too late. Dam it I just want to be the wise guy just once or when I come back as one in my next life. You are fantastic at writing like this. Really Lee it stands out. At the risk of pissing you off again for saying it, spread your wings, get this stuff out to smart people who appreciate your talent. Oh God, I said it again. Don't yell at me. I'll just cry, kick rocks and sniff.
Awesome! Congratulations on this win. I'd have left forever had it not.
Vicki
I don't ever plan being the fifteenth review but I keep hitting that mark. Hey, ya gotta be good for somethin.
Comment Written by vickib on 28-Aug-2015

Kit Carson's Buffalo - Conclusion by humpwhistle

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Ha Lee, that was great. Between gnawing on a beaver tail and picking a tick and eating it, I think I'll skip breakfast. Only thing I ever got doin that squatting is poison oak, and he gets a albino buffler to save his ass. I think you left room to keep this up and carry on. Like the Pawnees belief about white buffler, what he did with the hide, is some woman in New York wearing it as a coat? See where my mind went? Thanks I have enough trouble just ordering a coffee. Buffler is a funny word too by the way. It'd been fun to hear all the versions of Kit and his buffler, like gossip, not gospel. Stands on its own just as well too. Must be weird when the time comes to wrap it up and get out of character and you did it so efficiently too. Another thing I love about your writing and still manage to throw in side lines.
Hope your tooth is fixed up by now, god I hate those. You said "that you for following," in your notes if you'd like to change that. No big deal though you could have said, "tooth you for following."
Take care Lee.
Great story! Oh too, I cracked up over the deflected arrow thing.
Vicki
Comment Written by vickib on 17-Aug-2015

Kit Carson's Buffalo--Part 3 by humpwhistle

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I'm sure crusty ole Clem enjoyed reading the newspaper guys letters to his wife. Being a journalist I'm sure his writing had lots of description especially when he's so far away from his wife and how sweet those tities would be remembered stuck in the snow miles away from civilization not knowing if he'd even make it back. I like that touch you you added to this story that you are leading, leading, leading too. Haha Lee you are good at this story tellin. Seemed really authentic, I could see it all. Love your way with words.

Sorry so late I've been in Idaho for a few weeks. Drove across the plains where I imagined there was once Indians on painted ponies across the ridge.

Super!
XO
Vicki
Comment Written by vickib on 16-Aug-2015

Kit Carson's Buffalo -- Pt 2 by humpwhistle

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Hi Lee! 100 years before I was born!
Great, this is great. I'm waiting with bear breath. There's a lot of words I thought I should look up for definitions, most probably know but I'm always surprised how many I don't know, well, not really, and I giggled at some of Clem's strings of tongue twister words, hey you read that out loud. When did you hear a story when something didn't happen-made me laugh. Edwina Weems? Haha funny too. I had a list of things to mention that I thought was awesome story tellin but guess where the list is? In the thick grey vault and it can't remember shit anymore. Besides it's the overall story that sticks with me. But wow you add so much flavor. I'm very courious about this white buffalo.
Notice I'm review number 15 or at least I was when I started. Doesn't 15 reviews do something, I forget now. See? The vault, its in there somewhere.
Thank you for pulling me into your story like I was there. God that'd make me 157.
XO
Vicki
Nope 14, I'm losing it!
Comment Written by vickib on 28-Jul-2015


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