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A Goldfinch Suite by Pam (respa)

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You do a great job of not only evoking personality with your words, but reflecting the images you've used with word acrobatics. I particularly like the last one, but that may just be my weakness for the word 'pilfer!'

Mike
Comment Written by Fleedleflump on 02-Nov-2015

Hieroglyphics by Day Z Chayn
Chapter 1 of the book A Sonnet In My Bonnet

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Hehe, I love it. Not only is it a well formed sonnet, it's a satirical comedy and a comment on the cyclic nature of evolution. You made me both smile and think with this - a rare and welcome combination.

Mike
Comment Written by Fleedleflump on 02-Nov-2015

pumpkinful, the cummings of autumn by rspoet

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I like the sense of fun that exudes from every letter of this. Your colourful and whimsical presentation style suits the poem perfectly. I had a great fun time reading it.

Mike
Comment Written by Fleedleflump on 02-Nov-2015

Famine by ravenblack
Chapter 10033 of the book Shifting Shadows. Poems of Darkness

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A wonderfully effective collection of dark thoughts tied together by a theme of dryness and desperation. Beautifully evocative, I love the slow pace and thoughtful phrasing. Excellent work.

Mike
Comment Written by Fleedleflump on 02-Nov-2015

Bardi Grubs in Bush Tomato Juice by Walu Feral
Chapter 3 of the book Feral's Desert Delicacies

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Eww! Your meter is indeed a little wobbly and several lines are there just to flesh out the structure, but I only mention it because I don't care. Meter and rhyme are there to help you, not constrain you. The overwhelming purpose of this poem is fun, and that over-rides everything else. I loved this one.

Mike
Comment Written by Fleedleflump on 02-Nov-2015

Medals of Honour? by Eric1
Chapter 13 of the book WW1

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This is primarily an emotional piece, written from a well of caring and support. However, I also think it's clever, using straightforward language to create a piece with great depth and sincerity that aids the central premise. An excellent piece of work.

Mike
Comment Written by Fleedleflump on 02-Nov-2015

Happy Helloween by Dean Kuch

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Dean, I have missed the pleasure of reading your work. The devilish delight you take in conjuring ghoulish tales and vivacious visuals is both obvious and utterly saturates your words. This is a glorious piece and I adored reading it. Apologies if I'm gushing, but this really woke me up, and that's very much appreciated.

Mike
Comment Written by Fleedleflump on 02-Nov-2015

Autumn by Alan K Pease

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I find this piece quite beguiling. You balance outward simplicity with inward depths and do so expertly. I like poetry that challenges me to think, as this dies, whilst also conjuring a lovely kaleidoscope of sensory description. Beautifully done.

Mike
Comment Written by Fleedleflump on 02-Nov-2015

So I believe... by royowen

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I love your opening stanza the best - it's pregnant with meaning and implication. As guys, we're always walking that tightrope over life's river, balancing seemingly clashing urges of chivalry and craven needs. It's sometime dark and sometimes light, but always interesting :-).

Mike
Comment Written by Fleedleflump on 02-Nov-2015

Jalapeno Sandwiches by Walu Feral
Chapter 2 of the book Feral's Desert Delicacies

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Well, you certainly succeeded in making my skin crawl! I like that there's a touch of everything in here, much like the ingredients of your dish - humour, sass, delicious unpleasantness and a side of raw endeavour. Take that as you will, but what it means to me is that I very much enjoyed your poem :-)

Mike
Comment Written by Fleedleflump on 01-Nov-2015


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