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May your house... by royowen

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This is a beautifully written poem. It has a nice flow and the meter is spot on. I like the use of repetition (May). It really works to set the tone of wishing the reader well. This is a lovely religious poem and expresses faith without being overbearing or judgemental. I enjoyed reading it. I am happy to read uplifting poems in this troubling time.
Comment Written by Jomo17 on 23-Jul-2020

AmaZing Animals - Q by sandramitchell
Chapter 17 of the book AmaZing Animals

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Wow! This is awesome. I love the idea of an animal alphabet book for older children that includes interesting facts about the animals. The poem is excellent. The flow is perfect and it gives information in a fun way. It is obvious you have done your research. The pictures you chose complement your writing, and they are effectively positioned. I'm sure Eric (and other children) will enjoy this book.
Comment Written by Jomo17 on 23-Jul-2020

Kitty Playtime by LisaMay

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This is very sweet, lightheated poem and I enjoyed reading it. I love the point of view. You did a good job at capturing the cat's inner musings. I like the way the cat is trying to get the author's attention throughout. The rhyming is done well. I love the word choices and the flow. I'm not sure if you have a typo in the first line. You have "What can be more fun that me?" I think you meant to write, "What can be more fun than me?" Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written by Jomo17 on 23-Jul-2020
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Chaos on repeat by Iza Deleanu

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I enjoyed this slice of life story. It's very cute how your cats cause so much chaos yet bring so much joy. You describe their playfulness and your tiredness very effectively. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written by Jomo17 on 22-Jul-2020
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These Precious Words by jaybird1

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I loved reading this uplifting poem. Your poem flows nicely and has a pleasant rhythm. You effectively describe how writing helps you through life. Many fellow writers can identify with this sentiment. This type of poem is especially necessary during these trying times. I loved your word choices. Your rhymes work perfectly and nothing is forced. Thank you for sharing your work. I enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written by Jomo17 on 22-Jul-2020

It's Part Of The Job by Louise Michelle

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Great job on this satirical poem. The concept of the want ad is a very clever vehicle to get your point across. The poem flows nicely and your word choices are intentional and effective. I enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written by Jomo17 on 22-Jul-2020

Wedding Day by John Carey

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Great job on this sweet, romantic poem about your wedding day. It flows well and you provide good imagary. It is easy to imagine the setting and mood of the day. I especially loved the last stanza. It speaks to how the ceremony was a formality while your true love remains the same. Love the sentiment, cadence, and word choice throughout your poem.
Comment Written by Jomo17 on 22-Jul-2020

Greyson's First Pulled Tooth by Teri7

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What an adorable story! I was able to picture the conversation in my head because you described it so well. I chuckled when Greyson says, "But Mam maw, I really liked that tooth!" My oldest son (now 21) used to get very attached to things when he was little. This reminded me of the time we redid our bathroom when he was 3. He was sobbing hysterically, "They are wrecking our house." I really like the way you included how you explained the situation to him. He sounds like such a cutie. Great job on this story. It definitely made me smile.
Comment Written by Jomo17 on 22-Jul-2020

Anthrax by Iza Deleanu

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I enjoyed your humorous story. The back and forth conversation was clever and effective. Great use of dialogue. It was crisp and easy to read. The twist at the end made me smile. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written by Jomo17 on 22-Jul-2020
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No Tree To Sway by rchitwood

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I loved the message in this well written poem. The rhymes flowed effortlessly and made for a smooth and enjoyable read.
It made me think of my days at summer camp. The camp was in a heavily forested area, and I just loved being around all of those trees. It is sad to think of how carelessly some people treat the forest. Great job on this beautifully written poem.
Comment Written by Jomo17 on 12-Aug-2011


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