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Spyder Tonight
by Oatmeal
I'm tempted to write a great review since you review so much (obviously) and will no doubt come across my work. Still, I can't seem to do it. I have to be honest here.
First off, I should admit that I have prejudice against posts that are just small daily happenings with no literary content what so ever. I feel that most of the time it's the evil of fanstory making people want to see new reviews with lots of stars, and that most people give 5 stars for everything here, and definitely for things like this since they don't know how to review them.
Now, besides that... If you're going to post about daily life, fine. But make it interesting. This has no point, no direction, and ends on a completely different note than what it started on, completely unrelated to anything else written. More than that, the dialogue is lazy and boring. You may say, well it's what happened. I say, well, when a man walks across the street, you can say, A man walked across the street, or you can say The man with the jaunty hat walked slowly across the street, oblivious to the blinking red hand attempting to hurry his pace.
I hope this does not offend. I truly wrote it not to get the member cents but to hopefully keep you posting better work.
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Comment Written by FourByFour on 20-Mar-2007
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reply by the author on 21-Mar-2007
FourbyFour,
I have never seen you before so I am taking a wild stab at this but I presume that you are new. This is the first of my writing that you have seen which means that you are not aware of the background of me like the authors here.
I can be quoted saying many things and sometimes they weren't good but you will not ever find me claining to be a writer because I am not. I am a poet. I write feelings down on a piece of paper so that I can make it just one more day.
I am looking forward to seeing your work since you are so quick to judge. There are pros here that I have fought with and others that I would die for but I at least have their highest respect because I have proved to them that I have the guts to make it thorough another day.
I will also do a favor for you. I promise that I will not ever mention your name because it is my phone number that the ladies have to call when the pain gets too strong! They can call me anytime 24/7.
You are so right. I will try harder next time and maybe someday I will be able to live up to your standards.
OATMEAL
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reply by the author on 21-Mar-2007
4X4,
Thank you for the review.
Oatmeal
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reply by FourByFour on 21-Mar-2007
I'm not new, but have been taking a break from the site for a while. I'm sorry you were so offended. I made sure to make the criticism constructive. The purpose of this site was originally, and still should be, to receive criticism in order to better your writing, not to receive fake 5 star review that may make you feel better but not help you at all in the end.
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reply by the author on 21-Mar-2007
Fourbyfour,
It wasn't the stars that hurt it was your words! Calling me boring is pretty funny if you knew about what I have seen! Boring is as far from the truth as you can get. It is also considered a personal attack!
Oatmeal
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reply by FourByFour on 21-Mar-2007
Ah, but you misunderstand. I called the dialogue a bit lazy and boring. That is not the same as calling you personally boring. I am not boring at all but also realize that at time I write boring pieces that need more interaction or should be kept to my diary entries, and I expect fellow reviewers to point that out if I post it here as something that should be reviewed, critiqued. I apologize for the hurt feelings. Anyone who knows me here would tell you I am a very fair reviewer, and I do hope to read some more of your stuff and prove that. Sincerely.
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