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They're Waiting For Me by Barb Hensongispsaca
Chapter 43 of the book 2020

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Barb,
This is an opinion I share with you. I think we meet all our family members when we die. That includes pets as well as people.
I think you picked perfect artwork. It seems they are walking
towards the light people who have near death experiences say they see
they see before they returned to life.
Keep writing
Joan
Comment Written by dragonpoet on 23-Jan-2020

Whispers . . . by damommy

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Damommy,
I like this whimsical poetic description of fog. It sounds like the fog is enshrouding the speaker too. Luckily fog burns away.
Keep writing
Joan
Comment Written by dragonpoet on 23-Jan-2020

Such is Faith by Y. M. Roger

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This shows faith from the point of view of different ages. It seems to mature as the person matures, if the person can find a way to keep it
going.
I like the short lines and easy unforce rhymes.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written by dragonpoet on 23-Jan-2020

This Place Is No Place Fer Jake by jaybird1

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JLR(Jake),
This sounds like you would not like living in the West without home
conveniences or just not liking traveling away from home all alone.
In the third stanza to should be too and hart should be heart.
Keep writing
Joan
Comment Written by dragonpoet on 23-Jan-2020

Spellbinding Love by Diana L Crawford

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Diana,
NIce mix of words and artwork. It seems this poem was written for the pictures as an ekphrastic poem.
This tells of a love we all wish to find.
Congrats of tying for third in the contest.
Keep writing
Joan
Comment Written by dragonpoet on 23-Jan-2020

Mercy Finds Me by Peter Gardner

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Peter,
This is a nice praise song written to remind us that mercy and forgiveness
is always there for the asking.
I like the repetition in the first lines of the verses.
In the third line of the chorus, I think the 'on' should be 'Oh'.
Keep writing
Joan
Comment Written by dragonpoet on 23-Jan-2020

mandolin musings by Eleanor Frances (Elf)

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Eleanor,
This is a short poem that tells of an important part of your life. I guess music and writing are two gifts you have.
Good luck in the contest and keep writing
Joan
Comment Written by dragonpoet on 23-Jan-2020

Old Friend's Funeral by Sefiros
Chapter 22 of the book Sefiros Eishi - Timelines

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This short chapeer shows Mykels love for both his mentor and Caryl. He is ready to sacrifice his life to save her. It also shows how he tries to understand why people live the way they do.

I think that paragraph three needs some work. The children not adults
taken before their time doesn't seem to fit into the rest of the paragraph.
I also think the 'if' is needed between wondering and Loss. Loss then doesn't need to be capitalized.
Keep writing
Joan
Comment Written by dragonpoet on 22-Jan-2020

The Problem with Grief by ciliverde

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This is a well done free verse about how greif takes a long time to fade away enough to be borne easily. I like the metaphor of the quick shattering knick knack as a opposite of the way the heart breaks.
Keep writing.
Joan
Comment Written by dragonpoet on 22-Jan-2020

A Simple Life by Sugarray77

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Melissa
These four quatrains say a lot. It does seem life needs to become simpler again so we have time to notice all the little nuances of nature around us.
We all need to help ourselves and each other to create an accepting and peaceful world
Keep writing
Joan,
Comment Written by dragonpoet on 22-Jan-2020


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