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Dear, Dear Americans by kiwisteveh

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There are many on this site who share our views .s star. Let's
see who comes out of the woodwork for this post. There are just as many who are star-struck by this every.-day TV reality actor/

Great writing in a soft tone that is conducive to reflection.
You know my views so I won't repeat/
Comment Written by Spiritual Echo on 05-Nov-2018

Feisty Aging by Gloria ....

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See all the folks I meet my own age are so damn old. Some of them are in better physical condition, but their brains have shrunk.

Great poem, highly relatable. Has anyone asked you what's an A&W?
Comment Written by Spiritual Echo on 18-Sep-2018

Ladies that lunch by jenintorre

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This is more than a nice vignette using a budget of words, it's a a real truth for me. I don't have a single friend who qualifies as a senior and I'm pushing 70.

I found your opening line a little awkward, and suggest you turn it around. Both my friend's mother and mine were visiting our homes. etc.

There's no need to use her name--Liz--is not necessary in a short piece where there is no confusion.

Good luck.


Comment Written by Spiritual Echo on 18-Sep-2018
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Keeping it SIMple by kathleenspalding

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Your father sounds just like me. I have a limited interest in technolgy and need to call my son for advise. The basics as far as I go. Great little vignette from your life.
Comment Written by Spiritual Echo on 18-Sep-2018
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Dad! Not Here! by Mrs. KT

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Downright funny. You executed this prompt with perfect adherence to the principles of flash fiction. Creativity. super picture and in my estimation, a sure-fire member of the winner's circle.
Comment Written by Spiritual Echo on 18-Sep-2018
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Penance by Mark Valentine

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Great story, Mark, and very timely. I don't believe (I sure did read them all) that your second place win should be shared. Your writing is always of the highest quality and particularly in this case should have been a stand-alone winner.
Comment Written by Spiritual Echo on 17-Sep-2018

State of Calif. Vs Mrs. Milquetoast by michaelcahill
Chapter 8 of the book Short Stories and Flash

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A bent arc to another time. This takes a lot lot of creative licence, presuming a comparison to the future, but oh well, that's also what makes it funny or sad, depending on how much latitude the reader allows.

Your preferred font and colour always act as a signature, whether it's a blind contest or not. Another great example of how your talents continue to evolve.
Comment Written by Spiritual Echo on 16-Sep-2018
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A Knight's Revelation by Y. M. Roger

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I don't think in ten years I've ever given a six star rating to a 50-word piece of flash fiction. Impressive beginning--ESPECIALLY--and the ending gave way to profound thought. Can we separate a person from a quality, sometimes surprising ourselves?

I remember someone said something along the lines of...courage isn't fearless, it comes when a man is frightened, but does the right thing anyway.

Great entry.
Comment Written by Spiritual Echo on 16-Sep-2018
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I Am SO Tall by Pam (respa)

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This is cute, but I think you could expand this to incorporate a theme--often a strong point in children's books, The idea of short and tall, and all things relevant to how people judge is a distinct possibility for additional books.

I like that you include longer--more than a single syllable words--exposing toddlers to language beyond cat, dog, rat. LOL.

We never know where inspiration might come from, do we?
Comment Written by Spiritual Echo on 16-Sep-2018

Grandpa's Ashes by Nanny 6

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This is a good story, but I think you've created some confusion at the end. If a reader has to stop and think about who the character might be is to interrupt the flow. By naming the mantle ashes--Grandpa Goldman--it wasn't obvious the ashes belonged to your father's father--your character's grandparent--even though it clearly says Grandpa and you've jumped to the conclusion the reader will know. I had to stop and think about it.

Wouldn't it be easier to have the ashes belong to their mother? No name need be introduced to clutter the write and it would be obvious the sisters didn't care about their mother either.

I might also consider having a singular sister so as to avoid any confusion as to who is speaking and it will make no difference to the strength of the ending.
Comment Written by Spiritual Echo on 16-Sep-2018


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