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An Inspiring Survivor by Pam (respa)

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Though this is a touching story, your poem reads like a newspaper article instead of a poem. You did however follow the format I didn't see a poem. It is a good story of survival.
Comment Written by Yvon on 12-Nov-2019

Fall of the Hammer by Susan Larson

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Short but a necessity of the times I guess. This threw me off as I am not familiar with Martin Luther. Looking for autumn and finding a reform was odd. If I didn't read your notes this would have been puzzling.
Comment Written by Yvon on 12-Nov-2019
Read and reviewed with blinders on.

Two Turkeys by Jannypan (Jan)

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This was different than I usually see. To use an ence rhyming all that way must have been fun finding all those words. Well done as it all rhymes. Ha, ha
Comment Written by Yvon on 12-Nov-2019

Hound Dog Face by EricDaGoose

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A sad yet interesting piece. Kind of reminds me of an old man with saggy skin. The rhyming was good along with the meter. The ending kind of sums it up. If you can live with what you look like and others can't screw them.
Comment Written by Yvon on 12-Nov-2019

Forsaken... Forgotten by Artasylum

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Your wording is impeccable. Nice to read the different chapters of this bench and park. Many years can bring joy and tears. I think I hid under that bench many years ago. I like how you mixed in the fun and sad. Well done if I do say so myself.
Comment Written by Yvon on 20-Jun-2019

A Sum of the Parts by Rachelle Allen

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Yes it takes a lot to put together a person or poem for all that matters. God gives us many gifts and one of them is definitely humor. Stay happy and healthy and keep spreading joy.
Comment Written by Yvon on 11-Jun-2019
Read and reviewed with blinders on.

Discomfort Zone by Chip Kuzborski

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Tread lightly if you dare. that would be my thoughts of this image. Syllable count is accurate. Subject is multi-diverse as many fears on the ledge of life can be stomped on. Well done.
Comment Written by Yvon on 11-Jun-2019

Summertime by Jeffrey L. Michaux

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Even with the image of the dragon with the fire coming from it's 'mouth' this is a little odd. I do however like the last sentence. dissolving the last remnants of spring.
Comment Written by Yvon on 11-Jun-2019

Voice by 24chas

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She must have used silent words to tell you she loved you. Odd metaphor 'a rose opening' liked it though. Could be she said nothing and the hearer only imagined it.
Comment Written by Yvon on 11-Jun-2019

Holy Seed by Bill Pinder

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There is little to this poem as it is short. Many would contradict the righteousness of many so called Christians. There are many devotees that follow the path as well. I have a little problem with your choice of imagery. Christ's resurrection was not from the cross. His death was. So the two brought down the stars in my eyes. Let's hope the good Christians multiply and not the fake Christians.
Comment Written by Yvon on 11-Jun-2019


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