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Voice by 24chas

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She must have used silent words to tell you she loved you. Odd metaphor 'a rose opening' liked it though. Could be she said nothing and the hearer only imagined it.
Comment Written by Yvon on 11-Jun-2019

Holy Seed by Bill Pinder

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There is little to this poem as it is short. Many would contradict the righteousness of many so called Christians. There are many devotees that follow the path as well. I have a little problem with your choice of imagery. Christ's resurrection was not from the cross. His death was. So the two brought down the stars in my eyes. Let's hope the good Christians multiply and not the fake Christians.
Comment Written by Yvon on 11-Jun-2019

The Burrowing Owl by Pam (respa)

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Lots to consider in this poem. The rhyming flowed with the pace. But was interesting were some of the facts you added. Hunting day and night. A garbage den. A rotating head. Good job. Nice presentation.
Comment Written by Yvon on 11-Jun-2019

Kleptomania by Rachelle Allen

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Kleptomania is a nasty disease but I think your photo depicts plain theft. I could be wrong but i think Kleptomania is more like putting on a sweater in a store and walking away with it. Nice last line.
Comment Written by Yvon on 11-Jun-2019
Read and reviewed with blinders on.

Lazy by nomi338

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The rhyming is spot on. The subject can be of any man or woman in the blue collar field of business. One suggestion- go to edit- then advanced options to shrink your image. I would use traditional view. Makes the picture clearer.
Comment Written by Yvon on 11-Jun-2019

If Only by Mrs. KT

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Childhood memories are many. Myself it was sports. I do recall reading the book that made me fall in love with reading "The Call of the Wild" by Jack London. I was young enough to see all the imagery and still read with that in mind.
Comment Written by Yvon on 11-Jun-2019

The Bell Tolls-For A Lost Poet by jaybird1

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Poets and people all have an end. But when words meant to enlighten by the poets soul is taken away, we all lose out . Bless this poet and the many more before him. The true ones must have a place in heaven.
Comment Written by Yvon on 11-Jun-2019

The Shadow by rspoet

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No doubt this deserves a six star rating the wording and rhymes are meticulous. I have been a fan of the Shadow radio program for years. One thing missing is Margo. But it is called The Shadow.
Comment Written by Yvon on 11-Jun-2019

Love Amidst Starry Skies by Jannypan (Jan)

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Looks like you hit the syllables right on. I am particularly fond of Van Gogh. He is my favorite painter. This is a nice romantic poem but alas Van Gogh had a turbulent love life. Well done.
Comment Written by Yvon on 11-Jun-2019

Confounded Conspirators by Cindy Warren

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Sounds political to me. Those who conspire to take a tax payers buck. Millions out of the coffers. There usually isn't much place to run to if the law is on your trail.
Comment Written by Yvon on 07-Jun-2019


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