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On Sunny Days by Spangle
Chapter 15 of the book Blessings for Barbara

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Is smooth and wonderful read, and a great example of the Tonka.
Like how you compared the harvest of goods with apartment of precious memories;. Ask you if you're riding, meaning, and flavor.
I see no room for improvement!

Blessings,

Brother Badger Cull

Darren
Comment Written by Badger_29 on 15-Oct-2020

gone missing by flylikeaneagle
Chapter 16 of the book on wings of eagles

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we need and moving, I found this child riding to be encouraging as far as your professor guns. Out of chaos comes Sir Nick but it takes a gifted writer like yourself to be able to handle this set of variables.
Comment Written by Badger_29 on 06-Oct-2020

Missing in Action by MissMerri

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Poignant and moving. I found this tale, along with your author's notes and important and valuable tribute.
good cinquain and commentary on the morning of the loss of a Navy and a family man.
Very well written, a great example of the format followed here.

Love and miss you!

Blessings,

Brother Badger Cull

Darren
Comment Written by Badger_29 on 02-Oct-2020

Two Little Angels by MissMerri

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I had to give this one six for a wonderful time with endearing quality. You managed to tie together concept and such a perfect way.

Blessings,

Brother Badger

Darren
Comment Written by Badger_29 on 26-Sep-2020

My Endless Thoughts by MissMerri

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I really enjoy this as you had quite a few thoughts to think of everything that you included in. Love your simile love you comparisons you have a very active imagination.

Blessings,

Brother Badger Cull
Comment Written by Badger_29 on 26-Sep-2020

Shady Consequences by Irish Rain

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I found it simply calculating. I had to read it five times before I'm drugged all of the shallows nuances. It's brilliant writing!.

Blessings,

Brother Badger Cull

Darren
Comment Written by Badger_29 on 26-Sep-2020

Loving Books by MissMerri

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Outstanding commentary on ark Rock. I love the way and I especially enjoyed the three authors you choose to honor with your writing. Very smooth what's a great opening line a supporting ending stanza.

Blessings,

Brother Badger Cul

Darren
Comment Written by Badger_29 on 26-Sep-2020

...And Twelve Wishes by Ben B.
Chapter 7 of the book A Dozen Wishes Around the Globe

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wonderful, titled altogether went full circle. I like how you tied in parts of the first one and the intervening chapters all into one in this. I find it interesting that he's older, but it takes us back to the original scenario of him and his g and his pets.

Blessings, brother Badger cull, Darren
Comment Written by Badger_29 on 07-Aug-2020

A Peculiar Discovery by Ben B.
Chapter 5 of the book A Dozen Wishes Around the Globe

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I enjoyed this, it was a little bit meteor and give the reader a bit more to think about. Again, I think you should find places to put in a sensory cues what were the snells what was the debt from the color of what they were saying what were they eating tasting how did they feel through each other or how did any of the material in this scenario feel as tactile sensory input? also what were the sound for me they hurt hearing? Sensory data add so much to your writing and little Q's if used properly and not over you can be very effective in putting your reader into this scenario. Blessings, looking forward to reading the rest!

Brother Badger Cull

Darren

Blessings
Comment Written by Badger_29 on 07-Aug-2020

The Party Crasher by Ben B.
Chapter 4 of the book A Dozen Wishes Around the Globe

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I love this chapter the best so far, this is spent you build and the parody of partying people in his difficulty in pushing the button I agree scenario. a very vivid image of the party going on, and the monster which comes out the only thing that I could suggest is that you tell your readers what was the aroma of the black goo and how somebody wrinkled been there knows probably a female at the party recoloring those and said oh that smells horrible. Another suggestion I might have, is that you change the picture for the chapters. Love the picture for the first chapter in the 12 wishes, but after that it's a bit repetitive. I suggest you find an appropriate image are easy to find on Google for each chapter and include that image so you're not using the same image over and over. Sincerely, brother badger
Comment Written by Badger_29 on 07-Aug-2020


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