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Exceptional

This work has reached the exceptional level

You know,

This is a VERY frustrating episode
for the father. He has enough shit
throughout the day establishing
and maintaining his manhood
without killing the Goddamn
morons in his and mankind's
way.

So, when the imbecile progeny
of his, that he loves without
parameter, doesn't listen to him,
but rather mommy...Jesus H. Christ,
don't you women ever understand?

It just compiles castration for the male.
Oh, I forgot, we are sooooo f....d up,
that all this is redundant, and completely
ignored by the mate.

I have sooooo much sympathy for the male
in this, that I now feel like a mysoginist.

I'm surte I f....d up the spelling. Sorry.

But, this was sooooooo educational for the
male, that I must render a six unto this,
or be relegated to the, uh, yup, you know.

Shit.

Victor Touche

Comment Written by victortouche on 20-Feb-2020

Last Call by Y. M. Roger

Exceptional

Oh my.
I had no idea until-
the end.

This was very good.
Can you always write like this?

Jesus Christ.
I'm in awe.
Do do do wah wah wah
blah blah blah

This idiotic edotor.

Doug

Comment Written by victortouche on 14-Feb-2020

Being Led Down the Garden Path by Susan Larson

Exceptional

Absolutely beautiful.

I was mesmerized.

Lost, and yet there.

I think...I stared.
Please forgive me.

Wonderful.

write some more,

Doug

Comment Written by victortouche on 13-Jan-2020

Pigtails, Mitts, and Summer Days by Mrs. KT

Exceptional

Oh my, oh my.

What have we wrought here?

I must say, it reminds me,
nay...hints, of the day...
I played baseball.

Oh yes...a heady game.
Can you, could you, will you
stand again as mouse...yet...
perhaps this time swing,
with no concern, with all your might,
to dare, to leave your basic plight,
despite all fears you have inside-

I will
I live
I can

You say to all inside...

Does Fate truly listen?
Or just the circumstance
prevail this time?

Perhaps thy cry
this time resounds
with all in time.

As you strike,
so sure,
so naturelicsh,
just this time,

and hit what all would dream
with rhyme...

another...
so...inclined.

Doug

Comment Written by victortouche on 13-Jan-2020

About My Mom - Phyllis Stewart by Phyllis Stewart

Exceptional

It is sad, but wonderful to see
Phyllis live again through her daughter.

Phyllis and I...were never close...but instead,
seemed to share a similar passion concerning
words. I review seldom. But still, Phyllis, just recently,
reviewed one of my poems.

"For Tori."

Her first line completely humbled me.
Reminded me, of all, of why, of le raison
d'etre. Le sin que non. (sp?) The...
je ne sais quoi.

Non, je ne parle pas francais.

Ich spreche deutsche.

Und Anglais.

Und alles das Phyllis denkt,
aber vielleicht nicht sprachen habe.

I should...have loved her more.
For she was quite, in her own way,
supportive of me.

I wish to give you my condolences,
and my most humble apologies.

victor touche

Comment Written by victortouche on 13-Jan-2020

To My Secret Admirer #4 by Sally Law

Exceptional

Noone taught you how to write, did they?
For only the soul writes like this.

I am very impressed.
And, I am not so often.

Keine wunder, sie hast so oft
meine schreibe gelesen.
Immer mit dir, Eine uberraschung
kommt an.

Wirklich, meine ich das.
ich kann nicht alles vorkennen.

Sie, nein, du..hast zu viel im deine
gehirn Leben gehapt.

Ich mochte nur, das ich werde alle
das du habt gelernt, komme auch fur mich
sein.

Comment Written by victortouche on 27-Dec-2019

Happy Thanksgiving FanStory by Sally Law

Exceptional

Well, I guess you knew what
you were talking about when
you said to stop by.

Your brief story read like
something I would have done.

No, this doesn't make me wonderful.
I simply admire such compassion in
your story. the way we all should be.

N'est pas?

Have a six.

Doug

Comment Written by victortouche on 29-Nov-2019

American Basics by Susan Larson

Exceptional

My dear Susan,

Victor here.
And there.

Immigration.
Hmmm.
Always bothered me when we become
selective.

Turn down impoverished,
disadvantaged, brutalized
people from anywhere.

They, are...
always the most grateful,
hardest working, best Americans...
just like our fore-fathers.

Just like what we used to be.
What we should represent.
What the Statue of Liberty
was always meant to .

Light the unquenchable torch.
A light to burn as long as
America, ney-Americans can stand.

Shall we not stand upright any more?
Must we look down as we cast our
selfishness as a shadow upon the world?

America must...bleed again.
Suffer...together again.
Live for something other than
sustainable pleasure.

I desire employment at the gate
to our sanctuary as it must ever
remain such.

As you can see,
this writing affected me.

Doug

Comment Written by victortouche on 26-Nov-2019

I have no clue by Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

Ain't it the truth, Sandra.
Good little ditty about us
poets.

You know, this may sound like
I'm a little full of myself, but-
I can't remember a case of writer's
block since I started writing
poetry 15 years ago.

Really?
Yes. I only write when I feel
inspired, by whatever. Any subject.
For instance, when my mom with dementia
telling me there was a light
emanating from a bag of sugar.

Seriously.
I thought-this is too good to not
put something together around it.

Now,
before poetry, all I ever experienced
was total writer's block all the time,
on any occasion I "had" to write
something.

LOL

Doug

Comment Written by victortouche on 18-Nov-2019

Ellie and Norm by Phyllis Stewart

Exceptional

Ok.
You got me.
A slice of reality today.
Very believable.

Probably more often than real pics, eh?

Superbly done.

Doug

Comment Written by victortouche on 17-Nov-2019