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Dandelions In Heaven by l.raven
Chapter 4 of the book Remembering Brooke (adewpearl)

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Hi Linda,

I enjoyed your poem for Brooke. It's heart-felt and sums up how so very many of us felt about Brooke. The following lines speak a universal truth about Brooke.
How do you say goodbye to someone
you didn't want to leave?

I missed Brooke from the first day she left.
Always hoping and praying she would return.

She was an amazing and brilliant lady.
So talented in her love for writing poetry, and stories.

Thanks for sharing.
Ray
Comment Written by mountainwriter49 on 19-Mar-2019

A Jewel So Rare by Ideasaregems-Dawn

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Hi Dawn,

I love your poem for Brooke. She would be pleased with the mono-rhyming stanzas and the beautiful phrasing you used. The following lines are my favorite:
Adewpearl isn't far away this night.
She's just behind the moon; out of our sight
to sit at Father's feet, and for Him write
the poetry so fine and full of light

-Ray
Comment Written by mountainwriter49 on 19-Mar-2019

You Beat me Brooke by Teri7
Chapter 2 of the book Remembering Brooke (adewpearl)

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Teri,

This is a beautiful tribute for Brooke. I particularly liked the first two lines of the poem. It sets the tone beautifully.

ove and peace
With no more pain and lots of relief
She is with the One that loves her so

Ray
Comment Written by mountainwriter49 on 19-Mar-2019

The Announcement by robyn corum
Chapter 1 of the book Remembering Brooke (adewpearl)

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Robyn,

Thank you for initiating this tribute book project. Your comments are heart-felt and represent what so many of us felt about Brooke. I dare say there was no one like her on FS before her arrival, nor shall there be another such as she to grace the site. She was unique, and perhaps the most talented poet that I know. As you said, the end of an era.

I will be crafting a poem to include in the book.

Thanks again for your efforts in this regard!

-Ray
Comment Written by mountainwriter49 on 16-Mar-2019

Visits Beyond Understanding by Ideasaregems-Dawn

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Beautifully penned and straight from the heart, Dawn. This has indeed been a difficult period and Brooke's passing just sucks the air out of the room.
-ray
Comment Written by mountainwriter49 on 15-Mar-2019

I Gave My All by MissMerri

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Good Morning, Adonna,

I love this poem. Heartfelt and sincere, and a testimony to unrequited love.

You're a master of the Rondeau form and have executed it well with this poem. Importantly, the repeating lines do not feel forced. Meter and rhyme are spot-on in a difficult poetic form.

Well penned, my friend.
Ray
Comment Written by mountainwriter49 on 01-Mar-2019

Listen, look, seek by LateBloomer

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Hi LB

It's good to see your poetry again. I enjoyed your poem, and particularly the message it offers at the end. A good blending of heart-felt love and sound philosophy of life.

If I had one suggestion to offer it would be to remove the periods. I'm normally a punctuation kind of guy, but I think so many periods may interrupt the flow of the read.

Well done.

I hope all's well with you.

-Ray
Comment Written by mountainwriter49 on 28-Feb-2019

Mountain in the Sun by MissMerri

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Hello Again, Dear Friend,

Your tribute to Mikey is nothing short of perfection and beauty. I think you've described him well, and in so doing, spoken for many Fanstorians. Mikey was indeed a driving force on the site, working tirelessly to help evolve it; improve it. And always a positive force for those he touched.

Beautifully penned, my friend.
Ray
Comment Written by mountainwriter49 on 20-Feb-2019

Seasonal Love by MissMerri

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Dear Adonna,

I enjoyed reading your poem. I like how you used natural elements as a metaphor for human emotions/behavior. The first stanza is superb and introduces the poem beautifully. The last stanza left me feeling like, oh wow, how sad.

Your use of anapestic meter is excellent and adds a lyrical feel to the poem.

Well penned,

-Ray
Comment Written by mountainwriter49 on 20-Feb-2019

Because I Love You by MissMerri

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Good Morning, Adonna,

Written like a loving parent! I can fully relate to this short poem's sentiment. The poem is focused, well presented, and rings true.

Well done,
Ray
Comment Written by mountainwriter49 on 20-Feb-2019


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