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Giles Chancellor, QC Part 1 by apky
Chapter 20 of the book LONDON SPARKS

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I'm not sure Daddy was helping much with all his interruptions but that definitely depicts a father to a tee. At least I'd act that way with my daughter.
Great sequence of events here and great suspense.
Michael
Comment Written by mbroyles2 on 14-Apr-2018

Aleyde by Thomas Bowling
Chapter 5 of the book Dothan

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Caleb should know better than mess with Aleyde. Isn't she the one that was kidnapped in one of your earlier stories?
She was a tough little lady then, as was her daughter if I remember correctly.
Good for her sticking up for Dothan.
Michael
Comment Written by mbroyles2 on 14-Apr-2018

Heebie-Jeebies -- Conclusion by humpwhistle

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I hope this isn't the last we see of Detective Peel and his pal Curry.
I thoroughly enjoyed this humorous take on the hardboiled genre.
Sharp and witty with a fantastic pace.
Michael
Comment Written by mbroyles2 on 14-Apr-2018

The Rustle In The wind-Part Fourteen by Ulla
Chapter 14 of the book The Rustle In The Wind

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This was the perfect chapter to share your reflection of your father and the terrible cancer that took his life.
This part shares with us all of that emotion and we can sense your frustration with your mother.
Well done!
Michael
Comment Written by mbroyles2 on 09-Apr-2018

Shana and Anderson fly to Texas. by barbara.wilkey
Chapter 72 of the book Perennials of War

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I don't care what they say, having your pilot laugh when he's getting ready to land a plane can't be good.
It looks like Drew is going to open up about his feelings for Shana, let's see how she reacts.
Really like this story!
Michael
Comment Written by mbroyles2 on 09-Apr-2018

Ten hour shift. by Mabaker

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You can definitely see a strong bond between Lou and Joey, but the curious development is that of the Governor.
She seems very involved.
I like getting inside Lou's head as well.
Great job!
Michael
Comment Written by mbroyles2 on 08-Apr-2018

It's a start by Rasmine
Chapter 26 of the book The Adventures of Flower Power

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Looks like Flower is developing a crush, and it is only fitting that it be a Rose.
Very nice chapter, smooth flowing.
You have developed this character well. I could see my grandchildren enjoying a story like this.
Michael
Comment Written by mbroyles2 on 08-Apr-2018

Who tells? by royowen

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A tremendous daily prayer and Hymm.
I enjoyed the pace and the rhymes and reminded us to marvel at God's handiwork. I thoroughly enjoyed it.
Very nice job!
Michael
Comment Written by mbroyles2 on 08-Apr-2018

Blue Line by Michael Steinert
Chapter 3 of the book For Sarah

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Love most certainly can cause of to do strange things, or in this case. The lack of love.
Very snappy with a quick rhyme. Throughly enjoyable.
Very good!
Michael
Comment Written by mbroyles2 on 08-Apr-2018

Ole Molly by Dean Kuch
Chapter 6 of the book Monsters, Ghosts & Demons of Youth

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This is definitely the stuff nightmares are made off.
Your pacing and rhymes were dead on (pun intended)
and to think if we hear her, we're already dead.
Great stuff, Dean.
Michael
Comment Written by mbroyles2 on 08-Apr-2018


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