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When you found me ... by Melodie Michelle

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Wonderful story in a poem. Sometimes the best times of your life are the best poems to write. I like those rhymes. They did not feel forced in anyway but fit with the story. No fake snakes here.
Comment Written by forestport12 on 15-Jul-2020

Continue - Spotted Tail by Ben Colder
Chapter 30 of the book A Grain Of Wheat

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I think this is a most interesting moment in history you write about. I'm trying to think of any movie or screenplay that has truly brought this moment in history to the screen around that 1866. There's been so much written and told about leading up to the 1870 and the epic struggle with the Sioux. The part where you mention how despite the treaties, many aggressive settlers too Manifest Destiny literally and wouldn't be kept from gold mining or horning in on the hunting grounds. Another good glimpse of a time frame or period that saw a culture clash and inevitable war.
Comment Written by forestport12 on 14-Jul-2020

Sign of The Times by Robert Zimmerman

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Wow. I did not know Abraham Lincoln gave such a strong statement. We need his voice more than ever. What bothers me is how dependable common sense conservatives are silent. What's wrong with the Bush brothers and some of the others? They must think silence will prove they are not racist? Crazy. When they are debating taking George Washington down, we are on the verge of a Marxist revolution. Silence is not an option.
Comment Written by forestport12 on 14-Jul-2020

Remember David Dorn by judiverse

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I hope this gets the recognition here it deserves and wins. This is like an investigative report on the reporters. I was taught old school journalism in the few classes I took, and it looks nothing like mainstream media today that actually has blood on their hands for fueling hatred and violence, that is how blind they are to their own controlled narrative. They don't see its not reporting, it's creating and fueling a story, in this case violence.
Comment Written by forestport12 on 13-Jul-2020

The Barber of Springfield by judiverse

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Another interesting story that introduces us to another person know to Lincoln. Love the whole picture I got with your words, as Billy the Barber traveled up the Mississippi River and ran into Lincoln with an axe. Amen.
Comment Written by forestport12 on 11-Jul-2020

Some are rich, some are poor... by royowen

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I'm proud of the fact that you show solid doctrine as you express the relationship needed between man and God. Your words trigger so much emotion, esp. the way you string a phrase. One of my favorites: Is this mere chance or luck of stealth." Such unique phrasing by you alone throughout.
Comment Written by forestport12 on 11-Jul-2020

To My Husband by judiverse

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Nice touch with so few words that tell a love story. With few words, you have made manifold the love between two who finds the flame of love, the most apt comparison. Well done.
Comment Written by forestport12 on 11-Jul-2020

Spotted Tail by Ben Colder
Chapter 29 of the book A Grain Of Wheat

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Very good description there next morning when he says, "My head was like a busted drum." "The Powder River was about to detonate." Interesting inner dialogue. It helps to connect with the scout more and it becomes more evident how he tends to have a distaste for both sides and those innocent women in children caught in the middle. Nice touch and reveals more of the scout and brings even more depth to his character.
Comment Written by forestport12 on 11-Jul-2020

Mixed Emotions For All by Minglement
Chapter 43 of the book Soul Whispers

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You have an interesting and silky style in your writing that makes it attractive and magnetic to read. But in part, it could be because your plot and theme would have me at hello. I like how you describe the interaction and then the balance of inner dialogue made a difference. Keep going!
Comment Written by forestport12 on 11-Jul-2020

Creeping things... by royowen

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I love alliterations more than the rhymes. I like to use them in prose, but you have to be careful not to be too obvious. This one is sneaky too. I wasn't thinking of them until I went back and read it again, then I said, "Cool beans."
Comment Written by forestport12 on 08-Jul-2020


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