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My Northern Star by markk

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Absolutely a lovely love poem that I really enjoyed reading and that actually gave me nice chills. So nice choice of words and perfectly rhymes all the way through, which I always appreciate a lot. Happy New Year and thanks for sharing!!
Comment Written by AnetteAurora on 02-Jan-2011

One Family by The Stranger

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This work has reached the exceptional level

This is great and this is the best

We are citizens of Earth,
With nature, our mother

and

Political points of view,
Are they the work of the Devil?
Why do the world leaders lie?
Is it sinful to be on the level?

and

How they think it is right,
I simply fail to contemplate.

Simply just GREAT WORK!!
Comment Written by AnetteAurora on 02-Jan-2011

In The Ghetto by The Stranger

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Great and important poem. I have lived in several Ghettos around London and you just made me come back. I surely miss the 99% of good people, but also very clearly remember that 1% left in the other side. Life is surely hard in some of these places and I know what it means when somebody yells "RUUUUUNNNNN"!!
Comment Written by AnetteAurora on 02-Jan-2011

My Castle by Swansea

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I find it hard to understand though I understand that something has to be done. I think the last verse stands by it self just fine and is not sure about the first. maybe you cab explain me what it is you really want to say and I might change my rating.
Comment Written by AnetteAurora on 02-Jan-2011

Mother. by jktoolejr

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Very very sweet thought to write this sonnet directly to your mother. I am sure she deserves it. It is well written but it looks like a mistake have happened while writing the letter "e". Sometimes it happens to me aswell but it is possible to fix.

charg©d
lov©d

Since no one else have mentioned it, it could aswell be something only I can see???
Comment Written by AnetteAurora on 02-Jan-2011

Candle Light by The Stranger

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This is a very nice poem with a very nice rhythm with it all the way through. My favorite lines are:

The flames finally dwindle,
The shadows flee my mind,
Leaving questions unresolved,
Answers I must find.
Comment Written by AnetteAurora on 02-Jan-2011

The Last Dance by sweetwoodjax

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I know that a poem doesn't have to rhyme, but in this case because you are writing of a dance, I think it would have been better if it had a rhyming sound to it. What is in the poem is beautiful and I am sure she is up there still waiting for you to make her laugh again! Blessings!!
Comment Written by AnetteAurora on 02-Jan-2011

Greed Rules the Waves by tati

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I find it a bit hard to read this as poetry. Somehow it comes to sound like an article in the newspaper. Despite that I must say that what is in this writing is of most importance and it makes me so sick I could vomit. When you use numbers from statistics it works very good and makes it very real...as It sadly is. I would surely have given you six stars if you had made more like poetry! Happy NewYear and hope for the world that the people begin to think for them self. Money can't be eaten!!!!
Comment Written by AnetteAurora on 02-Jan-2011

Pages by words

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Very nice free verse poem. It seems very easy to read and what a great way to begin the new year. My favorite part "
so
as the nubile year
unfolds

I will dip
my pen
in love's glowing
grace-filled
ink "
Great job!
Comment Written by AnetteAurora on 02-Jan-2011

Barbeques, Aussies & beach time fun by melyuki

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Oh I wish so much I was you today and many other days. I am from Denmark on the other side of the world, but I have really really good Aussie friends, and have been visiting your beautiful land three times and is deeply in love with all part of the beauty it holds. Enjoy the beach, while I will go and slide down some hills in this freezy snowing land of mine. Happy New Year. Will never forget my newyear in year 2000 at the beach in Byron Bay. Unreal time!!!
Comment Written by AnetteAurora on 02-Jan-2011


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