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Release Me by Hitcher

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Hitch..These are my favorite lines and reviews of them;

When her soul sailed to eternity
My despair was a raging sea.
Pain quickly turned to anger
As why, laid waste to me.

You opened the work up with the soul sailing to eternity...this is a beautiful visual to my mind

I like the line as why, laid waste to me...it stood as no service to you for no explanation could be fathomed for the loss you felt

I felt the desire for release in the end...which is to catch up with the soul that awaits you in eternity, eternal peace...the tie-in.

This was another of your great pieces, that I enjoyed very much in analysis and the perfect combination of words used to bring your Nonet to a beautiful crescendo....good luck in the contest...an excellent contender....FREE-ONE
Comment Written by FREE-ONE on 17-Jul-2012

My Father's Flag by artemis53

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I truly understand the sentiment and feelings when attending a military funeral. I have had to participate in them while I was in the service and it's very sobering to know that one day I would have this done for me also..I felt every word in this writing and understood the depth beyond just putting it here for others to read...this is truly a departure of many things sacrificed one which is the loss of a family member and two recognizing the service to our country and those that chose to do it....I salute your father for his service to this nation and your son ...and will have him in my prayers...Thank you for writing something so close to your heart and beautifully displayed and allowing me to feel that my time served was not wasted for love lives on forever...FREE-ONE
Comment Written by FREE-ONE on 15-Jul-2012

American Holocaust by Meta~Mark

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Well Mark...I stopped over to show you some love and I must say this was absolutely BRILLIANT...I have Blackfoot Indians in my family according to my father and I was adopted and found out much later...the spirited side of my writings are pulled I believe from this...your words capture so many things that it's like a drum beat in my head of spiritual uplifting from deeds past and future...

Holocaust of natives, a sacred crime
Merciless harvest of man's resign
Eyes sewn shut to murder obscure
Let there be sight, a mantra of pure

Mother Earth creates the shallow below
Father Time passes the watchman's glow

There is light in this writing...a movement to remember and never forget...I hear the sounds and the beat and the triumphs through struggles...this was awesome Mark and I give my six to you gladly....FREE-ONE

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Comment Written by FREE-ONE on 14-Jul-2012

(nonet) Enlighten me by visionary1234

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Do as I say but if not shut up!!! Girl..this screamed loud and clear through the screen....how many people talk all through the side of their necks to become tomorrows news...I don't have time to place a list out or I would be writing all night long but your words where well organized and truth driven...Your nonet was spot on and I truly...truly enjoyed..speak truth and it shall manifest for good...love-FREE-ONE
Comment Written by FREE-ONE on 14-Jul-2012

Sounding Joy by Gert sherwood

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Hi Gert...I enjoyed your couplets...the rhyming schemes and sounds produced were superb! I loved the visual of when spring coughs up weeds...you have so many visual metaphors that it was enchanting and delightful and using the pooh sealed the deal for me...great job and keep pushing your beauty through....FREE-ONE
Comment Written by FREE-ONE on 14-Jul-2012

Parchissi, Fried Eggs and Plantains by silverdime74

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You have written a piece of poetry from your heart and I will not address any grammatical issues in it for understanding that words that written in connection to release can be straighten out once that has passed on to the sheet of paper...I truly love that your reality had set in after she left here physically but her spirit lives within you...all that she taught remains and now through growth can be utilized...sometimes a loss is our greatest teacher and you are your grandmother's greatest pupil living and breathing her good work she shared...thank you for sharing your heart...FREE-ONE
Comment Written by FREE-ONE on 14-Jul-2012

haiku (fury) by rjuselius

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Is the oceans rising up against man or is man the reason for the fury...you have captured much in the work...the vision of foaming of a rabid dog in comparison is vivid and strong...I thought the words were tied in well leaving the last line (in which I'm a lover of Greek Mythology) insightful...good job on this and good luck in the contest...FREE-ONE
Comment Written by FREE-ONE on 14-Jul-2012

Accomplishment by rama devi

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I like this tie-in for the picture reflects a loyal pet who will love you regardless...the philosophy is leave the egos on the shelf and show me who you really are...this world would be so much better off with the depth of true love without all the garbage of life attached to it...good pondering within this one Rama....FREE-ONE
Comment Written by FREE-ONE on 14-Jul-2012

Love by artemis53

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This was a beautiful piece of work...I jump on and off this board but I truly enjoy your work also and will show you effective today...this is deep and swirls in thoughts of knowing the truth behind a word that is often shown and express by covering it in material things instead of the rawness of the underlying meaning-till death do us part...I love you unsheathing it here and you have totally drawn me in ...this was fab...FREE-ONE
Comment Written by FREE-ONE on 14-Jul-2012

Transformations by ekpoet11

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Since...everyone else has corrected you on the spags...I will talk to you strictly about what I found interesting about the work...first I understand it to the fullest without your authors notes...Words are on of exploration and a never ending high...they are constantly transforming for each mind views differently and each writer moves the words around in so much variance that there is infinite possibilities...your a deep person and one in which I like through your openness to explore and write outside of traditional concept and thinking...a movement of next level thinking is what I see here and I can walk in the same path....good stuff for me to ponder in....FREE-ONE
Comment Written by FREE-ONE on 14-Jul-2012


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