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Candy Is A Man's Disease by victortouche

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Hello old "imposition on the planet". I'm not really back after a two year hiatus but to re-new my membership was the only way I could access my portfolio, my novel in particular and I'm thinking of working on it again. You haven't lost your disarming and charming sarcastic tongue in cheek (I think), way with words and I for one admire witty sarcasm. There is such boyish appeal in this post Victor and though I don't lump myself in the same basket as the average woman, none of us can resist this trait in a man. I am trying to write this non-review with a broken wrist so I will just say that whilst I have no intention of being active on the site, I couldn't resist saying hello to my very virile Victor. I must say that I agree with you that it takes time to learn about "the bees" and by the time you do, you can't be bothered buzzing around the way you used to though having said that, "candy" isn't just a "man's disease". I like to look too only now, the young buffed man I'm admiring just sees his grandmother. Oh dear. Lovely to chat with you Sir Victor. You are one of the very few 'old' names I still see on the site so Mr Irresistible, I couldn't resist. The Blue Pixel aka Carol
Comment Written by the blue pixel on 17-Aug-2016

The World Is Big by adewpearl

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The insignificance of we mere mortals, in all our magnificence, be we big people or little people such as Sawyer, is beautifully illustrated in this delightful poem Brooke. Reading your work I am reminded that if I don't start writing poetry soon, I will lose whatever ability I have or had so thank you for the lesson in conveying an undeniable, wonderful message within the framework of that little thing we call a poem. That little thing is one of the greatest things in life as you well know and by the way, Australians ONLY say "aren't" with one syllable but I do know how, (I think) how New Yorkers say it, or instance. I can't imagine there are any accents out there in FanStory land that wouldn't read your words with great ease and admiration. I know I always have and always will. It feels good to be reviewing you again. I hope all is well in your world. Much love, Carol
Comment Written by the blue pixel on 13-Apr-2015

When a Poet Writes by MissMerri
Chapter 47 of the book Love Songs For Every Heart

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Hello my old friend. I don't know why I chose your new offering to review after having reviewed nothing and not even logging onto the site for so long but seeing your name in my inbox made me smile and directed me to your own smiling face and then, (if memory serves me correctly), your envelope poem. LOVE the rhyme scheme. I am sure that the best poetry we write is written when we write it just for ourselves and if someone else happens to be peeking, then that's great, of course. The truth in my words cannot be disputed in my humble opinion and considering there are so many poems written about why we write or just poets in general, you have managed the nigh on impossible and that is to write something unique in its content. It was beautifully written and sang to me for sure. Loved it. Thank you for stirring the old poetess in me. I hope you and yours are very well. Much love, Carol (Pix)
Comment Written by the blue pixel on 13-Apr-2015

Leap by adewpearl

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Short sweet, definitely to the point and a very clear point at that and your poem is the very definition of an epigram Brook, only in perfectly rhymed and timed poetry. All criteria have been met in every way. Your home truth was expressed in both a clever and amusing way and where epigrams are concerned, I couldn't ask for me. Well done my friend. xx Carol
Comment Written by the blue pixel on 27-Sep-2014

Aphorism 4 by MissMerri

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A bird in the hand or in this case, on the thumb, is worth two in the bush?? LOL I just came across this post when I finally logged onto FS Adonna after such a long time. What a clever girl you are. You are probably wondering where on earth I came from suddenly and I don't think I told you but I lost my mum 8 weeks ago just 9 months after dad so my head and heart have definitely been elsewhere and I have no poetry in me and wonder if I ever shall. Still, I very occasionally log on just to see what is happening and I did re-new my membership just in case I become creative again. That should explain my absence but as for your riddle in a poem? I loved it but this supposed to be a review so the writing was clean and expertly rhymed and timed and I thought the way you revealed the 'truth' within your poem was excellent and very very clever. I hope you are well and forgive me if I do a disappearing act again but at least now you know why. Much love, Carol
Comment Written by the blue pixel on 27-Sep-2014

Silence by kiwisteveh

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I neither know the rules applicable to the Naani nor do I particularly care Steve when I read your beautiful words. They are made more so by the fact that I know I have witnessed a similar sad scene or two, in my travels. Perhaps I have even sent this same message out to passers by myself when feeling alone. "Smiles a desperate plea" is immaculate use of the English language if I may use such a clumsy expression. The indifference of many people to the painful loneliness of others as well as the isolation of your hero longing for some human acknowledgement is keenly felt in your work. Best of luck to you in the contest. I loved it. xx Carol
Comment Written by the blue pixel on 20-Sep-2014

Explosion! by tfawcus

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Dear Tony,
not being au fait with the Naani form though it is not new to me, I appreciate your author's notes. I have total confidence in excepting that you have the rules down perfectly though I can almost imagine you felt it a shame that you felt obliged to explain your very clever final sentence with its double meaning. I loved the writing in your notes as much as I did your post. Best of luck to you in the contest.
Regards, Carol
Comment Written by the blue pixel on 20-Sep-2014

Doc Martin by Father Flaps

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Dear Kimbob,
It is entirely fortuitous that I happened upon this big tick of approval for one of my favourite shows, Doc Martin. I say fortuitous as it is rare that I even log onto the site these days but I'm glad that I did as it motivated me to write to you via this most interesting post. I never would have thought have using a post to share my interest in a television series but your writing was such that it will certainly pique the interest of others and therefore, your post is a successful piece of writing in my eyes. When I saw the actor who so brilliantly portrayed the good Doctor in another part entirely, I was pleased to see that the gentleman could indeed smile and wasn't really as shut down as he appears in the British series. He keeps to his peculiar characterization so effectively and wonderfully annoyingly all the same time, I was beginning to wonder how the man himself 'really' was.

Being filmed I believe, in Cornwall, only heightened the charm of this series. Thank you for reminding me of Doc Martin and also that I was very overdue to say hello to you so hello dear friend and I hope I find you well. In the meantime, I totally concur with you that this programme is the best of British.
Love, Carol
Comment Written by the blue pixel on 20-Sep-2014

Glass Half Full by tfawcus

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A little optimism is just what I need at the moment and this cute little poem with even cuter hero, hit the mark, told from an animals point of view using a technique I appreciated and using a very clever paradox regarding two different types of glasses - one literal, the other, figurative. I had trouble reading the fourth line, first stanza in the established metre and and being Australian too, I didn't think I could be putting the emphasis in a different place than you Tony but I just couldn't get this line to read the same as the rest and I really tried. In doing so, I saw the difficulty incorporating the words "without fail". "His life is good and cannot fail" is one possibility I suppose and please forgive me for saying so, but I believe your poem, regardless of its cute brevity, deserves something more "Tony like" than "without fail". (I have probably just lost a friend but I hope not).

I don't for a moment mean for you to substitute your judgement for mine but may I suggest the following for your consideration. It changes your final line and even the end rhyme in the third so anyway, with my apologies, here goes:

Madrid today is forty-two
Too hot for me -- Pablito, too.
While I complain, he wags his rear
To fail's not in this dog's career.............. (or something along these lines).

Perhaps your poem is an illustration of how using the same number of syllables in every line, does not guarantee a smooth metre and perhaps, this review is an example of Blue Pixel arrogance and obsession with timing but in any event,
I don't see the point in reviewing anything other than honestly. I always hope never to offend but just to offer another way of looking at your own words and thoughts. I will doubtless regret sending this to you especially as you are a such a fine poet but it is just my opinion. I think you will understand what I am trying to say very clumsily. I know you will being a glass half full kind of guy. lol x Carol
Comment Written by the blue pixel on 23-Aug-2014

Shadow Dance by adewpearl

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Hi Brooke. Thank you again for your message on my homepage. I truly appreciate it. I have had no poetry inside of me for the longest time and maybe I never will but I am trying to review just a little and as always, you have delighted me. This time with more of 'Sawyer's' wisdom through your eyes and pen. Shadows truly are an amazing phenomenon and a child must truly be in awe of his/her little black self always following behind when the sun is shining. 'Sawyer' asks a very good question about where his shadow goes when the sun disappears but regardless of the answer to that question, he just knows, without questioning it, that he and his shadow are inseparable. That is another of the wonderful things about children. They know when NOT to ask questions but just accept. Perhaps that is a similar thing to having faith but you know I am not the expert on that kind of thing. It felt very good to be reading your poetry again my friend for I can be rather lazy and not actually critique it and it also reminded me that some things DO stay the same even though my world otherwise feels very different now. Something huge and irreplaceable is missing but your poetry remains comforting and wonderful to read and I have missed it. xx Carol
Comment Written by the blue pixel on 16-Aug-2014


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