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The Sliding Board Caper by damommy

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I really enjoyed your poem. It's a little slice of life.
You did a good job with your form, you held true there. I mostly appreciated the simplicity of it.
There isn't anything I would change.
Comment Written by MsPetra on 06-Jul-2019

An Example by victortouche

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Once again you have done a great job here. I love how your words and line intermingle with one another.
As a whole I get what you are saying. You have done a great job here. I will be looking forward to your next offering.
Comment Written by MsPetra on 06-Jul-2019

My Dad by LG Wolfe

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I enjoyed your poem. I felt the emotion you conveyed. Thank you for that. For what it is I wouldn't change a thing. You've done a great job here.
Comment Written by MsPetra on 06-Jul-2019

A second chance... by royowen

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I feel as if you shared something important with me here. That is what I appreciate most about your work. Also, that there is always a place for the all mighty in it. Thank you for that.
I didn't see anything that needed changing. I enjoyed the ride.
I am looking forward to your next offering.
Comment Written by MsPetra on 20-Jun-2019

A Mouse in the House by humpwhistle

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You had me wondering for a while there. My trust in you as an author kicked in and I wasn't let down. I loved the spin you put on it and the ending was marvelous. Thank you for that.
I didn't see anything that needed changing. The fact that I wanted everything to be clarified is what kept me reading on. You are a great author. I always look forward to your work.
Comment Written by MsPetra on 20-Jun-2019

Bound and tortured by jack silver
Chapter 1 of the book Slow Morph

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I can see the effort you put into this. Unfortunately that's the problem.
What stuck out the most as needing fixing is the weight of the narrative. It's like it's a character in the scene. Also, I noticed a few errors that you can easily fix.
I liked the idea here and the presentation. Work on your narration a little. I should seem as if it's barely there, or (best case scenario) not there at all.
Comment Written by MsPetra on 20-Jun-2019

Twins by JLR

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Though I don't have a twin I get what you are saying here. In giving the words thought it tickles me. It would have been nice to have a twin around.
There isn't anything I would have done differently. I am looking forward to your next offering. I hope it is as witty and thought provoking.
Comment Written by MsPetra on 20-Jun-2019

Ode to a Grey Sweater by A. Willow Bends

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I liked your poem, especially the ending. You walked me on a walk with you in telling your tale. It reminded me of an article of clothing I loved years ago.
There isn't anything I would have done differently. You did an excellent job with your rhyme and meter.
Comment Written by MsPetra on 18-Jun-2019

The Mystical Night by Pam (respa)

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I liked the pace of your poem. I wish it were longer. It went so quickly.
Your rhyme and meter were spot on. I didn't see anything that needed changing.
You've done a great job here.
Comment Written by MsPetra on 18-Jun-2019

Warm Thoughts About Winter by judiverse

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I felt a deep chill of bitterness as I read on. I don't know if that is what you wanted.
Though I wouldn't call this a nostalgic look back through time I appreciate having read it. Thank you for that.
Comment Written by MsPetra on 18-Jun-2019
Read and reviewed with blinders on.


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