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The Walking, Talking Rectum by Mastery

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LOL Congratulations! I just happen to stop by to see how everyone was doing. I really miss you guys and being on here. I really loved your contest winner. Very funny and well written. Great ending too.
Comment Written by amahra on 16-Jul-2019

Big Russ by Mastery
Chapter 9 of the book Shadows of Sin

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Wow! without having read the previous chapters, this was damn interesting. I couldn't stop reading. You are really good at these detective stories. It reminded me of The Maltese Falcon. I love your style and the way you include tiny details: like the hidden cigarret pack, and Krispy Creams in the trash. I'm not back yet, but just had to see what you were up to. I really enjoyed this chapter. Just a couple of things below:


"... a wide butt and a hairline that probably hadn't seen his eyebrows in years. ( LOL!)

"Deckle shook his head slowly, from side to side." (you don't have to say [from side-to-side. Shaking your head means "side-to-side) just like nodding means up and down; just say shaking or nodding. The reader knows what you mean.)
Comment Written by amahra on 20-Aug-2018

Regret by Mastery

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This is beautiful, Bob. The words are meaningful and of course the short poem is well crafted. It is very deserving of winning the contest. Not out of the woods yet with my eyes. So glad this is short so I can read you.
Comment Written by amahra on 06-May-2018

Expecting by Mastery

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Read it with one and found it enchanting. Poets usually make excellent writers because of their ability to provoke imagery in the reader's mind. I love your rich action verbs. And the poem reads so relaxingly as it flows.
Comment Written by amahra on 25-Apr-2018

Lost and Found by Mastery

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Hey, didn't know you were back. I'm not too formiliar with this contest, but you know I like whatever you write. Sorry, you didn't win. I shouldn't be reading; I can only use one eye. Surgery next month. I only read this one because it's so short. Glad you're back. Really missed you.
Comment Written by amahra on 23-Apr-2018

Goodbye from Bowl of Stew by Phyllis Stewart

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I've been away so long that I don't have the luxuary of saying I will miss the Bowl of Stew series. I'm glad I got to laugh and enjoy the few I was lucky to read and review. But, knowing you, Phyllis, I bet you've come up with something new that will be even more enjouable and exciting.
Comment Written by amahra on 23-Dec-2017

A Tale of Two Trenches by Dean Kuch

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You're a fantastic writer, capturing the horrors of The Great War as it was called then. No one even imagined ww2. I liked the sound of the war background, though I had to turn my speakers off so I could concentrate on the story.
Comment Written by amahra on 19-Dec-2017
Read and reviewed with blinders on.

Faith in Jesus! by Commando

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I really loved the story and was delighted that it was based on reality. I also thought the artwork was great as well. The bold strokes remind me of the famous Van Gough [think I spelled the name correctly].
Comment Written by amahra on 19-Dec-2017
Read and reviewed with blinders on.

Foward, march! by Jannypan (Jan)
Chapter 2 of the book VETERANS

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That was beautiful. Yours is the first I've read so far. Can't imagine another being this good, but I'll see. I recognized a little Ken Burns in this one. So glad you chose such a master to emulate.
Comment Written by amahra on 19-Dec-2017
Read and reviewed with blinders on.

The Real Deal by davisr (Rhonda)

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That was a great s.tory. I think, though, I would have been afraid to have stopped and helped the guy, fearing it could be a trick. But it seemed well and made its point. Salt and pepper curls framed a face etched by time and hard work. [loved this line.]
Comment Written by amahra on 19-Dec-2017


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