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We learn from failures by Sandra du Plessis
Chapter 340 of the book Little Good Morning Quotes

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I like winners that keep winning. I'm that personality, however, I have fallen from bikes, running, skating, blading and tripped walking. But I know that isn't everybody. I understand your poem. Good daily reminder. Have a great weekend. God bless you :)
Comment Written by sunnilicious on 30-May-2020

A Groom And Bride by Sandra du Plessis
Chapter 52 of the book 38. Nature poems

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This came out nicely. I like that you personified the birds as couple with a nest egg provided by you. Too cute and true... Lolz. Good visual imagery. Also, you met the syllable count. Great work :)
Comment Written by sunnilicious on 30-May-2020

Our Daily Bread by Sandra du Plessis

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I haven't eaten bread today, but just had a few biscuits. It's made from grains. My mother use to bake bread and make a pizza every Saturday. The grocery store has too many brands here. I could bake, but I'm married with child yet. I liked your poem. Jesus did eat bread, but not bread alone. God is great. Nice work :)
Comment Written by sunnilicious on 30-May-2020

Jawboning about the Jaw by lyenochka

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That sounded painful. Feel better. Multi-tasking is fine but it should be somewhat focused on the same thing. I doubt robots could handle those two tasks either. And I don't believe you found a bible correlation. Well, it made for longer storytelling. Nicely done. Good :)
Comment Written by sunnilicious on 28-May-2020

Teaching Humans to Understand by lyenochka

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You're hilarious. Good advice from a feline's perspective. Great personification. Well thought out. Clearly and cleverly written. Nicely done. Excellent work.

Nice artwork choice for presentation :)
Comment Written by sunnilicious on 28-May-2020

Postern Mystery Solved by lyenochka

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I read this poem and felt chills. It was a bit eerie coupled with the artwork choice. And I'm now spooked that its a real place. Great storytelling.

I noticed you're sticking to even syllables per line, but I'd edit "so dog can see" and add "the" or drop the "so" for just "the" to keep a lyrical flow.

Overall, nice work.
Comment Written by sunnilicious on 28-May-2020

Laughter is the best medicine by ameen786

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That was funny. Good visual imagery created. Well thought out. Clearly and cleverly written. Nicely done. And you met the syllable count requirements. Great. Good luck in the contest :)
Comment Written by sunnilicious on 28-May-2020
Read and reviewed with blinders on.

War or peace by ameen786

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You met the syllable count requirement. Some people have dangerous thoughts. Maybe all people that put those thoughts in action are the mine field. But in the end, peace of mind is apparent to others. It's like an outcome. Nice work. Good luck in the contest :)
Comment Written by sunnilicious on 28-May-2020
Read and reviewed with blinders on.

COVID-Blessing in disguise by ameen786

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Praise the heavens for such miracles to transpire. May everything get better again. Well thought out. Clearly written. Flexible poem to be used for a variety of situations, but current pandemic acknowledged. Good alliteration and consonance rhyme with restored and renewed. Also, you met the syllable count requirement. Nicely done. Excellent work :)
Comment Written by sunnilicious on 26-May-2020

Any regrets God? by ameen786

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I remember God loved the angels and damned them into man. So human must think and destroy themselves to learn a lesson. I can't say you're wrong. I want to be loved by God too. Nice work :)
Comment Written by sunnilicious on 26-May-2020


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