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one last flight by venancio

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I really enjoyed reading this piece. Good word choice adds greatly to the imagery and the general feeling of lonlilness.
Although I know it was intended, the discarding of capitalization seems to cheapen it slightly. I know it worked for some poets, but still.....

All in all, this is a very well-written poem.

-Jim
Comment Written by James Hastings on 23-Dec-2004

Behind This Mask by Karina J Belkin
Chapter 11 of the book Tasting Divinity's Kiss

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Well written and full of human emotion, this poem shows all too well the hypocrisy of people when dealing with the sins of others.
Karina, this poem flows well and the rhyming pattern is great.
Loved it.

-Jim
Comment Written by James Hastings on 31-Oct-2004

Heated Stone by Karina J Belkin
Chapter 8 of the book Ecstasy Is The Soul's Escape

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A marvelous tale of love and darkness! The rhyme and cadence is impeccable and the power of this piece remains strong throughout.
You should win this contest, hands down.
-Jim
Comment Written by James Hastings on 28-Oct-2004

Wings Expand by Karina J Belkin
Chapter 18 of the book Petals of My Past

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Karina, I really appreciate this poem, especially since I leave my wife for days at a time so I can earn a decent living.
I found ownership with this piece, I can tell you that right now!
The line before the last one in the last stanza feels a tad abrupt, even though you kept to the seven syllable pattern. However, it doesn't take away from the imagery I get from this wonderful piece.

-Jim
Comment Written by James Hastings on 27-Oct-2004

God by The Tortured Female
Chapter 2 of the book The Tortured Transexual

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Poetically, it's not the most perfect pieceI have read, but for the questions you have posed, I find this a great and wonderful challenge to my very own faith in God.
Why does God allow suffering? I don't know. But I do know that suffering is an important part of life that we will need to take with us in the next World.
Why are some people so rich and some so poor? I don't know. But I do know that God will reward us for how we used our resources, whether we be kings or paupers.
As far a blessings and curses go, we all get them, whether we be believers or not. However, I have found that the greatest curse is not believing in a God who really does love us and who has a distinct purpose for us. We are souls of free will. We are not forced to believe in Jesus or God. We must find the spirit inside of us who will show each individual the true path. For me, it is Jesus. I want to say it is for you as well, but you must find out for yourself. Ask God to show you that path and see what happens.
I, too have written poetry about God. I too have suffered ridicule for being alive. Faith is a matter of divorcing the natural feelings of the flesh and realizing that our eternal future has yet to be realized outside of this body.
I did enjoy your poem. Thank you for sharing it with me.
-Jim
Comment Written by James Hastings on 23-Oct-2004

Steps in Heaven by zwriter

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A gentle, yet profound piece of free-verse is written here. The fact that family love is not just a matter of flesh and blood is told sweetly and succinctly in these few verses. I felt the love and kinship shared with this "step-child." Excellent work.
Comment Written by James Hastings on 23-Oct-2004

Care To Dance? (Redux) by TERMITE

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This poem gave some interesting imagery to the reader. I found it quite intriguing, yet somewhat vague in dealing with the loss of the one that is mourned.
Comment Written by James Hastings on 23-Oct-2004

Simple Steve and the Halloween Quiz by mrgrunty

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This was a fresh and interesting twist to the Halloween theme. The poem itself was entertaining and while the rhyming may have been force a little in a few lines, the content as a whole flowed well. It goes to show what pumpkin heads can do!
Good job.

-Jim
Comment Written by James Hastings on 23-Oct-2004

Within Your Heart by Helvi2
Chapter 3 of the book Inspirational Poems

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A beautiful sentiment, indeed. As far as format, some of the lines seemed to end abruptly and some of the commas used were not needed. Rhyming seemed a little on the forced side.
A good poem, but with potential for more.
Comment Written by James Hastings on 14-Oct-2004

Forgotten Memories by t. m. hope

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I sensed much feeling in this poem, and for that I found it a fairly good read. What I sensed as a problem was the redundancy of this piece. The last stanza felt a bit awkward when I read it. The poem as a whole seemed a bit too vague to get a real image in my mind.
Enjoyable, but could be improved on.

-Jim
Note: I read the revision per your request. I found this to be much better written and the imagery is more vivid as a result of your hard efforts.
Good job. I have revised your rating.
Comment Written by James Hastings on 14-Oct-2004


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