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Noellica
Rad God by Xylok
Chapter 37 of the book Volume 5

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That was some major bad ass God rap. I was pretty impressed. You should attach a sweet vid of you bustin the beats. Would have been way cool
; )
Comment Written by Noellica on 03-Dec-2011
Only you got me by alexisleech

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That was good! You have truly captured the lost hope and utter despair. I wrote a traiku called "Love Has No Goodbye/ The Widdow". It is more about the newly found hope of a grieving woman. You should check it out. From what I gather from your writing, you could use that kind of hope in your life. My best of wishes to you.
Comment Written by Noellica on 03-Dec-2011
Respect the Animals by puppylove2702

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I like the message you are sending because yeah it is bad... but really? It didn't do a good job of showing off your skills. I am entering the contest as well. I had to rewrite mine too. It would be wise if you found a new writing topic.
Comment Written by Noellica on 03-Dec-2011
Light by l.raven

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That was nice. It was encouraging. It was consise, short and to the point. Next time it would be wise to include detail.
Comment Written by Noellica on 03-Dec-2011
The Best is Yet to Come by Oldwarrior
Chapter 13 of the book An Oldwarrior's Poetry

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That was adorable! I was reading looking for anything unpleasing and found none. I wish I had advice to give to you other than never stop writing. You are good. Keep it up.
Comment Written by Noellica on 27-Nov-2011
Could I Have by pickelhead

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That was lovely. It kind of reminded me of Peter of the twelve apostles. Heloved Christ but out of fear denied being his aquaintance three times. After that he cried and felt so cowardly.
Comment Written by Noellica on 27-Nov-2011
True Friendship Free verse by Dutchie

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That was touching. I found enjoyment upon reading this piece, almost as much as I enjoyed the last one I reviewed. It was, altogether, a good piece. You are a good writer Fia,and I hope you never give up this hobby. In fact, if you keep practicing, you have a good chance of leaving fanstory behind and becoming a world winning author. Good luck!
Comment Written by Noellica on 27-Nov-2011
Dark Sister by HarlotOHara

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I enjoyed that piece. It showed exactly what it feels like to try to be there for someone who needs help but won't let anybody come close to them. Good luck with your friend! Let's hope she's not as insecure as mine was.
Comment Written by Noellica on 27-Nov-2011
Alone In A Storm by pickelhead

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In the third stanza, instead of saying All electric was gone, you should say All electricity was gone. Other than that, perhaps you might want to use more literary devices to liven up your writing a tad. That's about it as far as corrections go. It was a humorous poem. It was light and playful, as is necessary. Thank you for a good read.
Comment Written by Noellica on 27-Nov-2011
Sheba's Secret by smudge
Chapter 13 of the book The Talisman

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That was amazing. You had suspense, romance, passion, and the perfect ending. You made no mistakes as far as the storyline and details. The only improvement I can suggest would be to never stop writing this story.
Comment Written by Noellica on 27-Nov-2011
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