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Eleanor Buron

Women at War by Aussie

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One of the more moving poems I have read concerning WWII - Not knowing this story of loss of soldiers' lives, sacrifice and bravery made the poem so interesting! Worth many more stars.
Comment Written by Eleanor Buron on 26-Jan-2014

Red Balloon by ravenblack

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I like the way you construct your poems causing the movement to be more languorous - which in return adds a
haunting mood to the lines. I like this poem very much.
Comment Written by Eleanor Buron on 26-Jan-2014

The Gift of Love by STEPHEN A CARTER

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Beautiful valentine poem - reminds me of those old-fashioned valentines especially this verse:

Thus to this day I cannot hope to live,
Without a love that only Angels give.
Oh heart of mine I feel your presence near,
When once again you whisper in my ear,

Very nice!
Comment Written by Eleanor Buron on 26-Jan-2014

Tessa Is Laid To Rest by Margaret Snowdon
Chapter 78 of the book THE PRICE OF DECEPTION.

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Amazing description; chapter is strong and moves ahead at a good pace all the while the reader is wondering about what will happen next, given the children will need care.
Comment Written by Eleanor Buron on 26-Jan-2014

Not A Death-Bed by Margaret Snowdon
Chapter 77 of the book THE PRICE OF DECEPTION.

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This is an emotionally stirring chapter - the scene is vividly described. The writing is strong and the reader feels present in the room with Tessa. Each character is perfectly portrayed.
Comment Written by Eleanor Buron on 26-Jan-2014

A Disturbance by Margaret Snowdon
Chapter 75 of the book THE PRICE OF DECEPTION.

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Again, Beth is conflicted with dread as she thinks about what might have happened; dialogue and strains of mental move this chapter along quickly. what will happen after Beth's fears are confirmed?
Comment Written by Eleanor Buron on 26-Jan-2014

The Watcher -Two by Margaret Snowdon
Chapter 74 of the book THE PRICE OF DECEPTION.

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Of course every chapter is excellent - The descriptive details of each chapter are perfect in timing and depth - enough to create a realistic background, never overdone.
Comment Written by Eleanor Buron on 26-Jan-2014

The Watcher - One by Margaret Snowdon
Chapter 73 of the book THE PRICE OF DECEPTION.

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Excellent chapter with a deep sense of foreboding - Archie will be making a move. Contrast is remarkably well done in your writing: the calm with the unrest, laughter/loving warmth with tears/lonely chill.
Comment Written by Eleanor Buron on 26-Jan-2014

Torn Apart by Margaret Snowdon
Chapter 76 of the book THE PRICE OF DECEPTION.

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High drama in this chapter - tragic reactions throughout as a consequence of Tessa's death. I must read the previous chapters, missed by my two-week absence. Tension rises when the reader wonders what will become of the children.
Excellent writing.
Comment Written by Eleanor Buron on 26-Jan-2014

Worth The Effort by Peter@Poole

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Pleasing poem. Alliteration and good end rhymes.

prefer/shower - double rhyme, two syllable, the first syllable in shower is longer than in prefer which changes the rhythm slightly as well as the addition of the word 'and' adding one more syllable to line four. 8-8-8-9
Much as a composer shapes a melody, a poet uses variations in meter; this offsets monotony, too much regularity. Very nice poem.
Comment Written by Eleanor Buron on 12-Jan-2014


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