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How To Be Your Best You by Ideasaregems-Dawn

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This is REALLY lovely! I enjoyed reading it and pondering each thought and suggestion. I think there is a lot of valuable advice in your words. I personally agree with these statements and philosophies. They would go a long way to increase the value of a life if followed. Very well done!
Comment Written by Cheryl In Minnesota on 08-Sep-2012
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Innocence is Burning by J.Byers

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The topic of your poem fits nicely with the structure of the Pantoum. The repetition increases the power and passion as well as the emotion. The photo is stunning. It deepens and adds a lot to the words. I find the color scheme easy on the eyes.
Comment Written by Cheryl In Minnesota on 08-Sep-2012

Dream Catchers revised by Gert sherwood
Chapter 23 of the book Dreams

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I wish there were more positive dreams and fewer frightening and confusing ones. My youngest daughter always says to me, will u pray that I have good dreams tonight? She's scared of having bad dreams. Your poem addresses this important concern.
Comment Written by Cheryl In Minnesota on 22-Jul-2012

So Many Tears by l.raven

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I really appreciate u addressing such a current and important topic. This recent tragedy is on all of our hearts and minds and it's important to turn our attention to it and meditate on its effects.
Comment Written by Cheryl In Minnesota on 22-Jul-2012

The Harvester by artemis53

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Oohhh, this is a creepy, eerie poem with a satisfying intensity. The colors you chose for font and backgroung and crisp and offer a beautiful contrast. The rhythm and rhyming are consistent and well-crafted. The poem takes on the voice of one who warns. This is unique and adds interest to the poem. It is very descriptive. Super job!
Comment Written by Cheryl In Minnesota on 08-May-2012

reflecting by TammyGail

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Nice rhyme of "alone" and "bone" a few lines apart from each other. The one-word lines, toward the beginning and at the end add balance to the poem and round it out, with the longer lines in the middle. The whispy gray and airy white give the poem a light, ethereal feel and set the tone. I love the line "so easy... thrust." Very powerful! What do you think about putting a hyphen between "well" and "placed" (well-placed)??Effective alliteration with "shoveling" and "shit." "Twelve small selves looking back at you" is intense and awesome!! "You likeness..." or "your likeness?" Might recommend a "warning" at the beginning due the the "sh" and "f" word. This poem becomes and remains very strong. Well-done!
Comment Written by Cheryl In Minnesota on 08-May-2012

Extravagance by ameen786

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The picture got my attention right away. That was a good choice. Amazing. I like each line beginning with a capital letter. If soul is the subject of the verb "steer" then should "steer" have an "s" at the end?? (steers?) Should "focus" have "-ed" at the end (focused), since it is describing "him" and is an adjective here (I believe). I like that the poem is about a deep and serious topic.
Comment Written by Cheryl In Minnesota on 08-May-2012
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Spring Fever by Jo Pa Ha

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Oh, this is a really cute one. Enjoyed it. Made me chuckle out loud. Fits nicely into the syllable count and the color works well too. A sense of humor and poetic skill are both evident here.
Comment Written by Cheryl In Minnesota on 08-May-2012
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Tuesday's Garden Digs Butterflies by missy98writer
Chapter 67 of the book A Plethora Of Flower Poetry

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I like your poem because it is fresh, unique and prose-like. I personally like prosey poems. The visual shape of the poem/ lines and length of the stanzas are nice. My favorite line is "thrives due to creation." Very good! Often I think we hear "due to" in reference to negative things, i.e: the value of homes dropped due to the economy, for example, so it seems like a new twist to have due to refer to something as wonderful and amazing as creation. A lovely poem. Like the friendly "voice" that comes through too.
Comment Written by Cheryl In Minnesota on 08-May-2012

Aching Memories by snowflakes77

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This is a sad poem and one which I'm sure many can relate to and empathize with. I like the way you use the verb "descends" with heart as its subject. That is unique and effective. I also enjoyed the reversal of words/ Old English sound of "He knows not" on the second to last line. I never tire of language with that feel or from that era. I also never tire or rhyming and you did it well here.
Comment Written by Cheryl In Minnesota on 08-May-2012


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