Love in Living Colour
Chapter 9 of the book Colours of Love
Without knowing it, I was just in the mood for this one, Connie. It was creative in a wistful, breezy, almost jazzy style, with the rhyming not so much emphasised but always there, always musical, always raising a smile (flashbacks/IMAX - fantastic lines!).
You're almost dizzy with the memories here, as illustrated (ingeniously) by the tempo of the inner rhyming, as well as the enjambment, in this stanza. It has a breathless quality:
In blistering heat we had found our shade
green and fresh, and swayed with each blade, we made
love, orbiting our space, spinning in place,
in soul-seeping love where I still can trace
And I think these lines are fabulous:
this whiff of grass has my brain downloading
apples in free-fall from trees and baskets
This deserves to do well in the contest. It's colourful and a pleasure to read.
Comment Written by MercurySeven on 02-Jul-2018