My Comments

A Surprise For Everyone. by sandramitchell
Chapter 8 of the book Eric's Epic Adventures Bk 4

Excellent

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I don't think they're thinking of scrapping Herbie... how funny that I'm voicing that to the person writing the story!

Very good chapter. :-)

Has me wondering where/how this is all going to go?

I suppose I better stay tuned! :-)

Comment Written by wordsfromsue on 08-Apr-2020

The Aqua-Beings Want Answers by sandramitchell
Chapter 7 of the book Eric's Epic Adventures Bk 4

Excellent

I'm glad you went back to the italics. My mind could grab on to that easier.

Poor Jason Momoa's kinfolk aren't getting any encouraging answers here. :-(

I hope Herbie and Gizmo come up with something great. :-)

Comment Written by wordsfromsue on 08-Apr-2020

More Questions - No Answers by sandramitchell
Chapter 6 of the book Eric's Epic Adventures Bk 4

Excellent

Wow, what a turn of events!

I sense a great threat about to rear its ugly head (and it BETTER NOT look like Jason Mamoa!)

Now you've got me worried for Eric and the rest of us humans. :-(

You've decided to go with the single font... did most readers like that better?

I anxiously await the next chapter. :-)

Comment Written by wordsfromsue on 24-Mar-2020

The Aqua-Beings Tell Their Story by sandramitchell
Chapter 5 of the book Eric's Epic Adventures Bk 4

Excellent

Wow, Sandra, the complex layers you manage to weave into your story, amaze me!
I realize it's fiction, bit I feel like I'm learning so much!
Keep reminding me, this is just great fiction, not real, and Jason Mamoa won't be riding in, to save the day. :-(

Great chapter. :-)

Comment Written by wordsfromsue on 24-Mar-2020

Eric Has More Surprises! by sandramitchell
Chapter 4 of the book Eric's Epic Adventures Bk 4

Excellent

I really enjoyed this chapter with its variety of happenings and the surprise twist at the end. The end creatures sound a bit like mermaids.

I am curious to learn what happened to their planet.

Regarding the different fonts for the thought transferring versus the storytelling and conversation between Herbie and Eric, I did not find it confusing.

Comment Written by wordsfromsue on 24-Mar-2020

Herbie Wants to Mind-Merge by sandramitchell
Chapter 3 of the book Eric's Epic Adventures Bk 4

Excellent

I can not give 6 stars until I see Jason. ;-)

Ooh, good stuff kiddo! I'm anxious to hear what their questions are. Probably: "Do you want to meet Aquaman?" :-)

This chapter flew by and I detected no errors.

Comment Written by wordsfromsue on 24-Mar-2020

First Contact by sandramitchell
Chapter 2 of the book Eric's Epic Adventures Bk 4

Excellent

Alright, I'm keeping my eyes open for any Jason Momoa sightings! Hubba hubba... back to the story.... exciting stuff. :-) I look forward to learning more about the creatures Eric is interacting with.

This sounds like a promising adventure and I'm already hooked. :-)

One possible correction:

A stunning waterfall could be seen frothing and churning as it hit the river below, only to be caught up and dragged away by the current. Eric had never seen water as clear and blue as this one. (I'm not sure 'one' sounds right. Possibly omit 'one'.)

Comment Written by wordsfromsue on 28-Feb-2020

Eric And Herbie Are Off Again! by sandramitchell
Chapter 1 of the book Eric's Epic Adventures Bk 4

Excellent

Hi Sandra! I must be honest... I shall keep reading this book in the hope that eventually Jason Momoa will pop in when Eric gets to Atlantis! Now there's a lovely thought. :-)
This sounds like an exciting adventure, sure to keep Eric and his friends on the edge of their seats.

Okay, preparing to meet Aquaman! :-)

Comment Written by wordsfromsue on 28-Feb-2020

The FINAL CHAPTER of Book 3! by sandramitchell
Chapter 12 of the book Eric's Epic Adventures Bk 3

Excellent

Ahh, Sandra, such fun for Eric. I'm guessing your grandson really enjoyed this adventure. :-)

Fun, satisfying ending to this story. I'll bet Eric can't wait for the next one!

One correction:

For the next hour or so, Eric, Herbie and Zig had so much fun floating around in the gravity free room. But all to (too) soon it was time to go home.

Comment Written by wordsfromsue on 12-Feb-2020

The Burial Chamber by sandramitchell
Chapter 11 of the book Eric's Epic Adventures Bk 3

Excellent

I have a hunch what may happen next, but will not say, in case I'm dead wrong!

I liked this chapter a lot, as it felt like we saw intentions shift and not pure terror.... but then, you could be lulling us into a feeling of false safety!

Oh dear!!

:-)

Comment Written by wordsfromsue on 04-Feb-2020