Contact Us | En español    
         Join today or login

Bill Schott

Searching... by Judy England-McCarthy

Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

This 2-4-2, Searching, has the right set up and seems to say that what the seeker wants is to find God and then have that spirit inhabit his or her life. ....
Comment Written by Bill Schott on 02-Dec-2020

Season of Gratitude and Grace by juliaSjames

Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

This 2-4-2, Season of Gratitude and Grace, has the right set up and reminds the readers to give thanks for what we have and for being able to give thanks at all.
Comment Written by Bill Schott on 02-Dec-2020

The Robinson

Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

This is a big beginning to Hilda's story. A great deal has been jammed into it, but the next chapter should probably take a smaller bite. You have a great set up which allows for a revolving door of personalities to come and go.
Comment Written by Bill Schott on 02-Dec-2020
Read and reviewed with blinders on.

The Neighbor's Chinkapin Tree

Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

This story, The Neighbor's Chinkapin Tree, is so well told. You have presented this highly believable account for two families existing within a one-sided relationship for years.
The resolution to the story occurs within the rules of the mother's beliefs, the the incident really does nothing to change the relationship of non-offensiveness.
Comment Written by Bill Schott on 02-Dec-2020
Read and reviewed with blinders on.

The Last Requiem

Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

This story, The Last Requiem, is an incredible story that held me riveted throughout. The shocking beginning, the search for the brother, the mystery solved, and all of the falling action to the conclusion were spell-binding.
Comment Written by Bill Schott on 02-Dec-2020
Read and reviewed with blinders on.

Trapped by Wendy Gordon

Good
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

This seventy-five-word flash fiction story, Trapped, has the proper word count and tells a real story about being left in the desert. What's missing here is a conclusion. solution. Your story obviously had a resolution; this one doesn't.
Comment Written by Bill Schott on 01-Dec-2020

The Greys

Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

This short story, The Greys, has a bizarre tale as its back story, which leads to this scene with the required lead in of foot prints. The talking wolves leads me to know where all that came from.
Comment Written by Bill Schott on 01-Dec-2020
Read and reviewed with blinders on.

The In-Between Christmas

Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

This story, The In-between Christmas, is a cool capture of that time in life where one love transitions to another. Dolls become musical instruments, and imagination becomes music.
Comment Written by Bill Schott on 01-Dec-2020
Read and reviewed with blinders on.

My Special Horse

Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

This story, My Special Horse, is the wonder of photographs to bring it all back. You have helped the reader feel all the aspects of taking a horse out for a ride that creates a bond.
Comment Written by Bill Schott on 01-Dec-2020
Read and reviewed with blinders on.

Time

Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

There ya go!!
This poem, Time, seems to speak to success when busy and now, with time to spare, greater success may be possible. I do not see much resemblance to a senryu though. Short, long, short is the format. Haiku-like.

Comment Written by Bill Schott on 01-Dec-2020
Read and reviewed with blinders on.


Page: 1 Next Page



  Contact Us © 2014 FanStory.com, Inc. All Rights Reserved. Terms under which this service is provided to you. Privacy Statement