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On Top of the World by kmoss

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This is really powerful and clean. I like the image of two eagles and the illusion of being untouchable. Human factors always can be the tipping point. Well done Krystal, I am really liking your style.
Comment Written by jaydub99 on 13-Feb-2021

Nightmares by jenintorre

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Great tone and vibe you create with very little in terms of words. Great cadence and pop to this. You needed the illustration but your words carried the message. I liked it. Nice submission, good luck in the contest.
Comment Written by jaydub99 on 13-Feb-2021
Read and reviewed with blinders on.

V-Day Ditty by Elizabeth Emerald

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Interesting and well written. I must admit you caught me as I was reading through the lines and I didn't expect the ending. I was thinking she is saucy and just throwing it out there.....and then you reel it in. Your tease at the end was my favorite line. Well done!
Comment Written by jaydub99 on 12-Feb-2021

Time to DetOX by Susan Larson

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This is a fun and amusing romp! I must admit I am woefully uneducated in the Chinese New Year and all regarding it but this is intriguing. Great punch and flow to the piece. I like the yellow background as it gives the reader a sunny, maybe (dare I say it) optimistic feel. Nice job, this was fun to read.
Comment Written by jaydub99 on 12-Feb-2021

Genius Inside by easyeverett

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This is tremendous. It was well written and had a wonderful cadence, but the beauty was the references and thoughtful content. I found myself looking up some of the names as I wasn't familiar with them and felt my life must not go on until I knew who they were and what was so about their life. This is exactly the point you are making in this piece. To engage, to make someone pause and think. To all the great poets....and I clink my glass to you as well. Cheers!
Comment Written by jaydub99 on 12-Feb-2021

Harsh Winds Now Blow by Mrs. KT

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I grew up in Southeast Idaho and winter was brutal. By Feb I was ready for spring. This brought up those feelings of slipping, shivering, trudging, and freezing. It is well written and carefully put together. Your last line is my favorite one. One must hold fast, indeed. Outstanding.
Comment Written by jaydub99 on 12-Feb-2021

Picking My Fat Nose by EricDaGoose

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I thought this was great. Fun and it rides with a smooth, alliterative pace. I love that you tried to do your own illustration and posted it. It makes the piece all the more personal and a reflection of you. This would be fun to read aloud and would make a great kids book addition. Nice job!
Comment Written by jaydub99 on 10-Feb-2021

Icicles by Cindy Decker 2

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Vibrantly presented and well written. Technically spot on and crafted with a touch of flair and alliterative bounce. I like the green background which against the icy front it gives the promise of spring. I like the line "Spring's elation". A touch of anthropomorphism maybe as if Spring resents winter and is excited for its day in the sun? Nice job...this gave me pause to ponder.
Comment Written by jaydub99 on 04-Feb-2021

Creating Opportunities by Mark D. R.

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Structure is sound and I like the way you presented the piece. Not a lot of words to work with and you make a solid point in that little time. I often feel these type of poems are a hand off to the reader. We are allowed to take it in and run with it. You have a good foundation for that. Nice effort, good luck in the contest.
Comment Written by jaydub99 on 04-Feb-2021

Groundhog Day by Anne Johnston

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Clean and well written. Growing up in Idaho I would wait with great anticipation for the groundhog to emerge. Winter is brutal there and hope springs eternal. I am not familiar with the nanni format but it seems you are spot on. My only suggestion would be to maybe, or maybe not, flip the last sentence to get the rhyme and add to the cadence. On a shadow, we depend. Just a thought. I liked it, and thanks for the job down memory lane.
Comment Written by jaydub99 on 04-Feb-2021
Read and reviewed with blinders on.


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