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Nobody by Jean Hornby

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Thank you. We see sad images of forsaken pets and you have made that personal for one. Maybe a puppy image would help? "She the once alone nobody
Was now no longer a stray" I found those lines a struggle.
Comment Written by vigournet on 31-Jul-2017

My Way Home by robyn corum
Chapter 4 of the book Book -- Happy Things

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Another wonderful poem, drawing me along the path amongst the trees. You write with feeling and simplicity. I walked with you, remembering my journeys home.
Comment Written by vigournet on 13-Oct-2015

Alone by The Mom/DarleneThomson

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Thank you for sharing both versions of your poem. Looking at your Profile I bow to your expertise and valuable experience.
Comment Written by vigournet on 12-Oct-2015

My Weekend Affair by robyn corum
Chapter 2 of the book Book --the Extras!

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Hi,
I laughed reading your poem as I have been there. Today's world yields little "quiet" with such easy accessibility. Your poem carefully paints a picture of an office worker desperate to get away from constant calls upon her time. I love it!
Comment Written by vigournet on 12-Oct-2015

Thirsty And Dry by patcelaw

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Great poem, based on wonderful stories. I lived with you and the women of the Bible as they experience God.

You have an extra "when" in "There were lonely days when"
Comment Written by vigournet on 12-Oct-2015

Ladybug by Ideasaregems-Dawn

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A lovely easy-to-read poem. Your love of nature oozes from the words. The word pictures you present to your reader create admiration for creatures great and small.
Comment Written by vigournet on 12-Oct-2015

The Bitter Hike by RooBoo

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Thank you for your poem. I could not believe that you are so young and yet perceptive in your feelings. It takes some folk years to appreciate what they have before it goes. Looking back can be with joy and pain.
Comment Written by vigournet on 12-Oct-2015

The Fallen by Ideasaregems-Dawn

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You use words and imagery in an excellent way. The feelings of a mother - driven to abort her infant - is very powerfully presented.
Comment Written by vigournet on 12-Oct-2015

A Happy Mariner by mermaids

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Great choice of art work and imagery. There is an extra 'his' in this: "he embraces his his mermaid "
I like that you have told a story in your poem.
Comment Written by vigournet on 11-Oct-2015

Memories of Muffy by Gert sherwood

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A lovely humorous piece of poetry. I admire the way you capture in words the fun of your cat, and love you show it.
Whilst poems are not under prose rules I spotted:
around [w[ ... an extra w
"Maybe I will change my routine tomorrow("), if there is open " there needs a close ".
Comment Written by vigournet on 11-Oct-2015


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