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Counting Candy Treats by LisaMay

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This is a nice poem. I am not sure this Halloween will be much fun for kids as they cannot go out or have parties. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing. Stay safe.
Comment Written by dmt1967 on 24-Oct-2020

Into the darkness by oliver818

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This is a sad but well told story. I would presume the dad had mental issues and I know how had that can be for the carer. Thank you for sharing and stay safe.
Comment Written by dmt1967 on 24-Oct-2020

Look back by oliver818

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This is a great piece. I prefer your stories, though. I like your descriptive pieces but I do love your stories. Very well thought out and thank you for sharing. Stay safe.
Comment Written by dmt1967 on 24-Oct-2020

Vampire fright by Anne-Marie brison

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Wow, what a story.
'I stared at the body in horror, a strangled cry of terror (rissing) to my lips. I (then) glanced around wildly to see if anyone else had noticed the body of the man with his throat ripped out. (rising) (delete)

Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing. Stay safe.
Comment Written by dmt1967 on 21-Oct-2020

Through the Seasons by Charley Lake

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This poem warmed my heart and left a lump in my throat. I think love poems are a bit cheesy for me but your poem might have changed my mind lol. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing. Stay safe.
Comment Written by dmt1967 on 21-Oct-2020

Always Remember Me by jaybird1

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This is a beautiful poem and sentiment. I think this is the best poem I have read in a long while. I also love the message behind this poem. Thank you for sharing and stay safe.
Comment Written by dmt1967 on 21-Oct-2020

A Risky Choice by Melanie White

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'(the) dampening of my dream' (The) It is just that the other verses start with a capital letter. I don't know if this was intended or a mistake.
Great poem and good luck in the contest. Stay safe.
Comment Written by dmt1967 on 21-Oct-2020

Ultimate by oliver818

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This is very well written and I like the end hook. I am not sure I like this piece as much as the rest but that is only my preference, hence the five, and nothing to do with your writing. Thank you for sharing and stay safe.
Comment Written by dmt1967 on 21-Oct-2020

To Shine Joy's Light by Mrs. KT

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My sisters thought I lived in a dream world also and had too much imagination. I think this poem is great and I like the way you look at life. Thank you for sharing and stay safe.
Comment Written by dmt1967 on 21-Oct-2020

Slicker Than an Oil Stain by Earl Corp

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This is a good story but very telling. Words like 'was' and 'had' I find give the story more of a telling vibe. Sometimes all that is needed is a bit of a reshuffle with words. Like the paragraph below.

'He heard her before he saw her. She was wearing heels that clattered with every step she took. He peered around the corner to gauge where she was at in her approach. She was wearing an evening gown and carrying a clasp purse and 15 feet away.'

Try...
'He heard the clatter of her heels on the pavement and peered around the corner. A middle aged woman in an evening gown with a clasp purse in her left hand approached the alley way.'

Thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest. Stay safe.
Comment Written by dmt1967 on 21-Oct-2020
Read and reviewed with blinders on.


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