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Frank De layna

Manufactured Enemies by Spiritual Echo

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Your thoughts are a reflection of my thoughts. Your writing is direct and to the point. No spelling or grammatical could be detected. Just need to tell you that all these national issues have led me to find a way of being happy. How can we be happy in these unsettling times?
Comment Written by Frank De layna on 26-Mar-2020

The Hostility Industry by judiverse

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Last sentence has "is" twice. Trump, his family, and all associated, have destroyed the moral landscape and operate out of the lowest high ground
that the cesspool has. Sometimes you have to fight fire with fire. The hypocrisy of the Evangelical right has lowered the bar forever.
Comment Written by Frank De layna on 07-Jul-2019

Mommy, It's Me! by Patty Palmer

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Your poem brought a tear to my old male heart. The way you gave a life and personality to an embryo was clever. anti abortion is a good thing but it needs twerking.
Comment Written by Frank De layna on 26-Jun-2019

Timeless love by kahpot

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The rhyming was perfect and consistent with the content. Reminds me of my life with my beloved wife. It is becoming rare for me to find good works of writing at fanstory. Than you very much for reasuring that there are really honest writers here among us.
Comment Written by Frank De layna on 12-Jun-2019
Read and reviewed with blinders on.

The young man I never knew by aroundthebend

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Other than one misspelled "fomment" instead of moment, very brief and simple. It is so very true. I also had a grandson I met later in life and I regretted it.



Comment Written by Frank De layna on 05-Jun-2019

Role Model by Rachelle Allen

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I enjoyed the story although the uncommon words took from it. Especially the word ensconced not a word in the dictionary. Some sentences are somewhat unconventional.
Comment Written by Frank De layna on 20-May-2019

The Good Old Days by Katelynn Barnett

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Very well written. I haven't liked the majority of poetry in Fanstory. Most of them don't rhyme; to me, they should. Your poem brings back memories of my youth. Spelling is good; content is consistent.
Comment Written by Frank De layna on 17-May-2019

The Lesson by A.J. Dodd (AD)

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Your article had good, would you say, cadence? It followed the stages of life. The ending written from someone that has experienced life.
No errors detected nor improvements necessary.
Comment Written by Frank De layna on 17-May-2019

A Fable by Wetbelly01

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Excellent fable or parable. The writing was simple and concise. You were not consistent in capitalizing the word "south." Will look to read more of your writings.
Comment Written by Frank De layna on 16-May-2019

Dont hate: Isolate! by His Grayness

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Your peice hit it right on the nose: isolation. My wife and I too, became, disgusted, quit believing in Christian hyprocrites, and everything Republican since Trump. And quit looking and reading the news. So now we judge people individually. But we need someone like Kasic(spell check).
Comment Written by Frank De layna on 14-May-2019


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