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The Guardians of Antiquities by Goodauthor

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This story didn't sound like a story but a narrated telling instead. There were a few missing words in the beginning and some names not capitalized. The author should read his work out loud to hear his mistakes.
Comment Written by Fandoodle on 29-Dec-2014
Read and reviewed with blinders on.

Who is Peeking at You? by rod007

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I like the surprise ending. I think you should have expanded the story about the arsenic part though. Good luck in the contest and thanks for sharing it. Well done.
Comment Written by Fandoodle on 29-Dec-2014
Read and reviewed with blinders on.

Gold Diggers by mfowler

Exceptional
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A humorous ghost story...I loved it. It was believable too. Good luck in the contest and thanks for sharing it. The best part was the last few lines about the doc joining them.
Comment Written by Fandoodle on 29-Dec-2014
Read and reviewed with blinders on.

Intervention by MusingsOfMWH

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Short and simple. It needed something more in my opinion to keep the interest for a ghost story. Maybe put more into the feelings of the character or using all five senses.
Comment Written by Fandoodle on 29-Dec-2014
Read and reviewed with blinders on.

Freaks & Geeks by Dean Kuch

Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

Great, entertaining story with so many pictures to go with it too. I didn't notice any errors. Thanks for sharing it and good luck in the contest. It sounded more like the devil than a ghost fiend however.
Comment Written by Fandoodle on 29-Dec-2014
Read and reviewed with blinders on.

We came upon a Child Ghost by K. Lorraine

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The story line was good and entertaining. I think some of the beginning sentences could have been cut because of too much detail. For a honeymoon couple I would have expected kissing, touching hands, etc. instead of only telling before going into the ghost story.
Comment Written by Fandoodle on 29-Dec-2014
Read and reviewed with blinders on.

Ashes to Ashes by giraffmang

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The story was a good effort but take out all the A's on the end of words. You could use other descriptions in the dialogue to make some one sound Irish than that. Repeated phrases work such as, for sure.
Comment Written by Fandoodle on 29-Dec-2014
Read and reviewed with blinders on.

Dead Man's Curve by billmetz

Good
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The story seemed like many told before from TV, etc. There were words left out and bad grammar used. If the author read his/ her work out loud he/ she would hear his/ her mistakes.
Comment Written by Fandoodle on 29-Dec-2014
Read and reviewed with blinders on.

It Was And Will Be Very Good by mauial

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Very good depiction of God and first of life. Yet out of Eden rebels went is a great line. Thanks for sharing your piece. Keep up the good writing and story telling. A paradise without stress.
Comment Written by Fandoodle on 27-Dec-2014
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Well that was Christmas by DR DIP

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I ate like a horse I can feel every hove is a great line. It made me laugh! I was surprised about the line will be a new man after reading about the belly dancer. This poem is a great ode to diet and the holidays. Thanks for sharing it.
Comment Written by Fandoodle on 27-Dec-2014


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