We came upon a Child Ghost
by K. Lorraine
The story line was good and entertaining. I think some of the beginning sentences could have been cut because of too much detail. For a honeymoon couple I would have expected kissing, touching hands, etc. instead of only telling before going into the ghost story.
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Comment Written by Fandoodle on 29-Dec-2014
Read and reviewed with blinders on.
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reply by the author on 29-Dec-2014
Maybe, with the sentence cuts, but I thought the story needed a little background on how the couple met. And then for the extra time spent on exploiting the sexual fantasies of the newlyweds, however, there was some hand holding. I chose to cut it back a little on the sex since the couple was in a car trapped with a ghost. The story really focused on the ghost and how the child had been searching for closure and a way to move on into the afterlife. I appreciate your review and the very nice stars. Thank you for your observations and all suggestions are always welcome and taken into consideration. Thank you for stopping by. K. Lorraine
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