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I Don't Feel Alarm by patcelaw

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A lovely picture of that stately Palm that enhances your clever 54-7-5 formatted poem. It does indeed convey tranquility. I wish you the best in the contest.
Comment Written by Treischel on 03-Jul-2020

With Precious Treasures by Sandra du Plessis
Chapter 7 of the book Wisdom & Truths to start the day

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Another one of your daily spiritual messages composed poetically from the book of Proverbs, written in 5-8-8-5 syllabic format that makes the quatrains tell the story expressively with reverence and wisdom. This one on treasures. Well Done!
Comment Written by Treischel on 03-Jul-2020

Where Will The Future Take Us? by Sandra du Plessis
Chapter 96 of the book 37. Relationships

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A wonderful Quatern full of the excitement of an old friend's return. It conveys the joy of previous association, and the hope of fond renewal. Good iambic tetrameter. I did find your rhyme scheme transitions intriguing.
Comment Written by Treischel on 03-Jul-2020

Not In This Life by Eternal Muse
Chapter 4 of the book The Sonnet Collection

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A poetically expressed "Dear John" letter done in a lovely English Sonnet format. Of the ilk as "Parting is such sweet sorrow." I like the transition from personal relationship to seasons changing.
Comment Written by Treischel on 03-Jul-2020

Love through centuries by Eternal Muse

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More than a Quatrain, I'd call it quatrains. You meter is a bit off on this one, but I liked how you pulled a historical into the present. Of course that surely can be done by reading a novel.

Line 5 could read:
A Rochester adored since teenage years
Line 9 could read:
And yesterday a miracle appeared
Maybe the 12th line:
A vision from two centuries' romance

At any rate, it could be either a comentary on reading historical novels. or a love letter to a ravishing boyfriend.
Comment Written by Treischel on 03-Jul-2020

Imprisoned by Eternal Muse

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A well crafted romance poem written in a sublime Shakespearean Sonnet format. Your iambic pentameter was flawless. Rhyme choices were well considered. Liked the "seeds of love" metophor. A solid volta on line 9. Just a touch of the Elizabethan in "Alas." All in all, well done.

I wrote a book on sonnets, called Take Flight: The Sonnets, with 170 sonnets in 74 variations on the form. So I like Sonnets, and yours is good.
Comment Written by Treischel on 03-Jul-2020

Knowing To You I Belong by patcelaw

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A very well composed English Sonnet that raises up your praise of the Lord in prayer and song. We hope the whole world would also sing along. Nicely done!
Comment Written by Treischel on 02-Jul-2020

My Special Spot by damommy

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You paint an idyllic poetic portrait of that cabin in the woods. Your aabb rhymed Quatrains flow easily on long/short line lengths with that anapestic cadence. Wonderful use of imagery. It tells a lovely story.
Comment Written by Treischel on 02-Jul-2020

Don't Be Deceived by Sandra du Plessis
Chapter 6 of the book Wisdom & Truths to start the day

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Another one of your daily spiritual messages composed poetically from the book of Proverbs, written in 5-8-8-5 syllabic format that makes the quatrains tell the story expressively with reverence and wisdom. This one on sinner's deceit. Well Done!
Comment Written by Treischel on 02-Jul-2020

The Different Lines of Life by Sandra du Plessis
Chapter 94 of the book 2. Free Verse Poems

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You achieved the Free Verse challenge about writing a poem about lines. I thought it was very insightful. it carried a strong message that was also spiritual. Good job!
Comment Written by Treischel on 02-Jul-2020


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