End of Life's Journey, Part 11
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Change Of Heart by victor 66

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Good evening, Victor,

Congratulations on winning the '100-word flash fiction' contest.

Your story takes but a moment or two to read, and yet it led me to consider many questions thereafter.

Being a non-believer of any Gods, (past or present,) It's only natural for me to sit here and say, 'Best choice you could have made.' But I can't because I'm not seeing or feeling the way you do.

I can imagine celibacy and I can imagine what it might be like to live within the confines of strict order. But I cannot imagine it being in any way normal, according to the 'natural' world we all live in.

To live with and be a part of the 'natural world, is for me, about as Godly as you can possibly be. Nature is God.

I hope that you made the right decision, my friend and that your wife is fulfilled with all the joy a man can bring to another human being.

Much love

tracey

To go against the grain of all that is here on Earth... can only lead to an unnatural and often unhealthy

Comment Written by trimple on 07-May-2019

This Other Guy by PeterRHW

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Good evening, Peter

I was just browsing the writers I'd fanned and thought I'd pop over to see what I'd missed.

I love the picture of your ole Bulldog. He looks (they all look) as grumpy as hell, and yet, most of them are especially lovely and wonderful with kids.

I don't know what ya like with kids, but the Bulldog is a perfect choice, given the topic of your poem.

We all have an inner self, I think. When we are quiet and yet those cogs are churning away, that's the other 'us' :)

I suppose though, that some people have the ability to switch off that monkey on a chain when in the company of others, whilst others still, have that little bugger unchained at times and let him get up to all sorts of unsavory antics. lol

I enjoyed this poem, Peter.

You're not alone, mate :)

much love

tracey
Comment Written by trimple on 07-May-2019

The Fantasy of Books by DragonSkulls

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Hello there, Ron

I read this and knew it was you.

Cracking little poem that got my vote.

kind regards

tracey
Comment Written by trimple on 06-May-2019
Read and reviewed with blinders on.

Heavenly Perspective by lyenochka

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Good morning to you, Helen

Your poem is beautifully written.

You consider the insignificance of our arguments and suggest that when heaven sent, it will all pale away to nothing.

I'm not a believer in any Gods or the concept of heaven myself and would argue that our fight for a more humane and understanding world for the future of all of our children, is certainly one worth fighting for.

But I understand what you mean overall :)

much love

tracey

Comment Written by trimple on 06-May-2019

Pillars of Gold by Gloria ....

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Good morning, Gloria

Your splendid poem speaks of a sad world to come, and yet we seem powerless to stop it.

Although mankind = art and creativity, we seem driven to destroy the most beautiful creation of all-- our natural world.

My favorite line is --

harmonious notes through the sandalwood fen.

The following verse is so tragic but beautifully told.

For you who can hear all the animals crying
will know when the trees have become violins,
will know when the stones have awakened as trumpets,
will know when the dying of music begins.

I hope this poem is selected for the 'poem of the month'

Wonderful!

Kind regards

tracey
Comment Written by trimple on 05-May-2019

Patience by rosehill (Wendy)

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Good evening, Wendy

Your little Lune Poem leaves your reader much to ponder and visualise.

Being a nature lover, I'd like to think the trout ate first :)

much love

tracey
Comment Written by trimple on 05-May-2019

A Leaf Worth Living by Bill Schott

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Dear Bill

I absolutely loved this poem of yours. Your description of leaves alone, I thought deserved top marks, but the overall scene I found superb.


A flattened face
breathes out the oxygen,
which generates new life.

When insects eat,
they find the green flag,
then dine with rare zeal.

At autumn's turn,
the weakened tassel
is pulled to the cruel ground.

Collected rudely
by unhappy rakers,
a pile of unheralded vassals
feed a final, fiery need.

Nature in a nutshell, eh, Bill...



Much love

tracey
Comment Written by trimple on 05-May-2019

Fearless Flying by LisaMay

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Hi there, Lisa

Oh, this is brilliant!

I've only been a member of the mile high club once, what a high it was! :)

LOve the build-up then the action and the aftermath. lol

I think we've all been there :)

Erica Jong certainly put women's sexuality back on the map.

Thoroughly enjoyed reading this.

Too many lines to repeat lol

kind regards

tracey
Comment Written by trimple on 05-May-2019
Read and reviewed with blinders on.

Barnabas Button-eyes by Dean Kuch
Chapter 14 of the book Monsters, Ghosts & Demons of Youth

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Good evening, Dean

I see you're back to your best with this, horrible genre :)

Brilliant storytelling that suits the musical background, perfectly.

Favorite line--

His soul, like coal, is black as pitch, his heart is filled with hate.

But I'm not too sure about this one.--

He'll drag you screaming in the dark, [blinded for all your years] -- Not sure this rolls off of the tongue as well as it should. I also wonder if the way in which you write this last line has the impact this poem deserves.

Just my opinion of course :)

Brilliant as always

much love

tracey


Comment Written by trimple on 05-May-2019

Lethargic by Debra White

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Hello there, Dear Debra

Sorry to read that you are a little under the weather, mate.

Nice metaphor, you as a little frog on her little pad. :)

Does the number 'twenty six' mean anything specifically?

Hope you feel better soon, Deb

much love

tracey

Comment Written by trimple on 05-May-2019


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