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Let Us See by Bill Schott

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Hi there, Bill

I'm not a lover of politics and even more of late given the monstrous plight of the American people and Brexit. I dislike a lot about America and its norms on many issues, but most of all, I cannot beleive that such a blantent idiot was ever voted for in the first place, let alone a second term, given his disgusting demeanour and blatent lies. I worry more about the mentally of some Americans more than Thumpit!

I have no gods to speak of, but Gawd elp the lot of us if this brainless thug gets in again.

kind regards

tracey
Comment Written by trimple on 16-Oct-2020

Squeezebox Dad Still Squeezes by Cynthia Adams1

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Hello there, Cynthia

Aw, your poem is so lovely as you relay how your dad would play the accorian at bedtime and how he appreciated all of your effort over skills :)

You clearly still miss him and by the sounds of it, I think everyone would love a dad as dear as he was.

A delightful poem

Good luck

much love

trimple
Comment Written by trimple on 16-Oct-2020

Write Simple by RodG

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Hello there, Rod

First of all, allow me to congratulate you on your win with this fabulous example of how to write.

You have used the 'haiku' as a pivitol force from which to start and I applaud you for doing so with eloquence and great detail.

I thought you might enjoy to listen to this clip from Leonard Cohen about how to write poetry.

Enjoy!

Brillaint read and it's most kind of you to share the bellyache and joy of writing with your readers.

much love

tracey

Comment Written by trimple on 16-Oct-2020

ATTENBOROUGH Dreaming by djsaxon

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Good morning DJ

Being a Brit, David Attenborough has been a part of our family's TV watch n learn for as long as I remember.

I once saw him interviewed and he was asked about his views back then about getting involved with politics... he stated that he was simply an observer and enjoyed exposing the beauty of nature to his viewers.

Clearly he now sees how important a role he can play by telling it how it is and how the human footprint is deliberately and sometimes understandably encroaching on the natural habitats of the animal kingdom.

Your ABAB poem tells of his undeniable passion and sense of urgency in his more recent messages and programmes on TV.

I have t watched the latest as my daughter said it was so sad to watch... But I know I must and I certainly shall.

Should we embrace the growing bloody plight
Or turn our backs on all that might have been--

Most of us know what we should be doing, but the truth of it is, is that we are all responsible and yet we continue to buy more crap we don't need with monies we don't have!

Money-- well... We can't buy another fecking planet, that's for sure.

Gawd elp us all, DJ.

A fine poem with much said and questions asked.

kind regards


tracey x



Comment Written by trimple on 16-Oct-2020

Wagering by Pantygynt
Chapter 43 of the book The Maid of the Mill

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Good morning to you, Jim.

I'm falling behind with this story. One reason being, that I find it difficult to concentrate for very long--I have a touch of ADD about me and it drives me to distraction and utter frustration as I read and re-read over again...

I am sorry to have taken so long, but I'll get there, no doubt :)


Well... onto your intriguing story.

That Tom of yours seems to be a right little rascal, an upper class one at that too!

Gawd, I remember those threepences like they were yesterday!


'I mean,' said Tom with a knowing wink, 'that my hammer will set off such a peal as will get the steeple rocking, and twist it so as no amount of virgins getting wed in the church could ever straighten it out.' This sentance is just brilliant. lol

Looks like this Tom is heading for trouble by the looks... and his father has caught eye of his antics... oo err

and his poor ole mum!

Look forward to trying to read the next chapter :)

Love the language and its sense of time.

kind regards

tracey



Comment Written by trimple on 16-Oct-2020

View From The Moral High Ground by LisaMay

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Good evening, Lisa

I hope you feel better now that you have got that out of your system :)

I couldn't agree more. The world does seem somewhat fucked, but then again... we have seen worse, all accept the small matter of the planet dying of course...

I remember once listening to Naom Chomsky who likened the human species to sheep in saying that we're terribly good at doing as we're told... Well... if we don t see a global shift to reduce the mess we're are all making continues for any great length of time, we may well see anarchy on the streets as we gasp for fecking air to breathe!

Money! That's all that matters in this damned world of our now, albeit political or otherwise.

And as for some of the God squad and their gleeful cries... Don't get me started.

A fine write, Lisa

kind regards


tracey

Comment Written by trimple on 16-Oct-2020

Eye Dialect by lyenochka
Chapter 20 of the book Words for Writers

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Good evening to you, Helen

This essay is very clearly written and to be expected of course :)

Eye dialect-- now I never realised that there was a word for spelling out how one speaks in ones own tongue. I know that Pantygynt is currently writing a wonderful period piece [which I am in the process of reading] in which he uses eye dialect throughout and it really does give one a sense of time and place as you say here.

I cannot for a second imagine reading English in Korean, but I would be only too happy to try.

There is another writer called Irvine Welsh who wrote several weird and wonderful books, inc Trainspotting. One of his books titled 'Porno' is written in Scottish throughout. It felt very odd to start with, but as I got into it, I was reading in Scottish and thoroughly enjoyed the experience.

Another interesting read, Helen. Thank you :)

kind regards

tracey

Comment Written by trimple on 16-Oct-2020

You Came Too Late by Eternal Muse

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Hello there, Yelena

This is such an unusual style of poetry. I don't recall seeing it before. It looks to be somewhat complex, however, browsing through the technicalities... you appear to have a natural talent for these.

A lovely story told in this poem, as the author suggests, love arrived too late and has since died, but that when the chaser finally joins her, then, they will embrace and live happily ever after.

Very nice to read :)

much love

tracey
Comment Written by trimple on 16-Oct-2020

Tiger Beetles by Dolly'sPoems

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Good evening, Dolly

This is a lovely sonnet, dedicated to this olympian runner; the Tiger Beetle'.

Loved these lines--

A jet propelled compulsion [close space] guaranteed . . .
olympic medalist, a connoisseur!

Alos enjoy looking at another of your water coloures.

kind regards

tracey
Comment Written by trimple on 15-Oct-2020

Musical Onomatopoeia by robyn corum

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Good evening, Robyn

This is a wonderfully expressed poem that denotes various musical sounds and the way in which each of them effects you and makes you feel.

The last line is great as you admit that you cannot hold a note.

Certainly musical and a gentle hint of humor at the end.
A fine entry to the contest.


kind regards

tracey

kind regards

tracey
Comment Written by trimple on 15-Oct-2020


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