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Columbo, Monk & the Busted Rung by Jay Squires
Chapter 2 of the book THE POCKET OF PUMPKIN PULP

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Phew! Jay, what an excellent chapter. I was on the edge of my seat although I still don't know why (as the reader.) As the author, you tricky dickens, you were craftily leading me down the path.

Paul is weird, probably psychotic himself. I cannot wait for the next chapter! And poor Lillian, oy!

Here, have a sixer for this super duper chapter!

Hugs,
Gayle
Comment Written by Showboat on 27-Aug-2015

The Pocket of Pumpkin Pulp by Jay Squires
Chapter 1 of the book THE POCKET OF PUMPKIN PULP

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Oh, goody! I'm at the first chapter! This is a good one, Jay. I have no idea which way you're headed, but you have several routes you can take!

I've got my editor's cap on right now, so forgive my sifting minutiae.

ly adjectives - not many, just a note to self, lol

In it, he was standing beside the mayor, who was cutting the ribbon - {In it, he stood beside the mayor as he cut the ribbon} As I say, minutiae.

she tested her smile! Love it!

the binder, spread out in front of him - I don't think we need the comma.

This is a really good chapter and I'll hurry over and make a fan so I get the notices!

Hugs,
Gayle
Comment Written by Showboat on 23-Aug-2015

The How of Rejection by Jay Squires
Chapter 15 of the book How This Critter Crits

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Ah, my friend, we've all gone through this, haven't we? I remember sending my first ms - cost $10 - to one of the highest regarded editors in the business, Donald Maas, owns his own literary agency, the whole enchilada.

So I'm sitting on pins and needles because, of course, not only will he publish me, this was the next American Novel literary winner. Finally, back comes the ms. With shaking hands I open the envelope, pull out the ms and notice - no check. I pull it out completely and in RED pen, scrawled across the first page he wrote TRIPE!

Gotta have a thick skin, not to mention a realistic attitude, 'cause he was right. That one was tripe, lol. I think FS has done so much for me since then.

Thanks so much for sharing, gave me a chuckle or two and a fun memory.

Hugs,
Gayle
Comment Written by Showboat on 21-Aug-2015

Jujee's Story by Writingfundimension
Chapter 7 of the book Stand Strong

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Hi Bev, another great one!

Glad you bring Jujee's personality out as well as the kind of home life she has. Sounds like her mother is totally self absorbed and has no time for her daughter.

Great job,

Hugs,
Gayle
Comment Written by Showboat on 13-Aug-2015

A Callahan Update. by CALLAHANMR

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Oh Roger, it's so good to see you again! Please give Marilyn a hug and a kiss for me, and one each to you.

My heartfelt condolences on the loss of your son. My prayers go out for you, such a horrible year and there's more to go.

I'm looking forward to chatting with you guys in PMs like we used to! Such fun.

Big hugs and tons of love to you both,
Gayle
Comment Written by Showboat on 09-Aug-2015

What's Happening to us? by lancellot
Chapter 8 of the book On The Radio

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Hey Lance, excellent presentation, my friend. Now, what is your phone number and when can I call? I have lots to say, lol.

Just a couple of tiny little things for your consideration:

I read of (on) the news this morning.

Two things have recently (have) happened in Baltimore

where Freddie lived and captured giant murals have been painted honoring him. I don't understand what you mean - are there a couple of words missing?

help anyone in anyway shape or form. Perhaps ..in any way, shape or form.

Just super duper, Lance! Miss you!

Hugs,
Gayle
Comment Written by Showboat on 28-Jul-2015

Mount Saint Helen Erupts by Alan K Pease

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Hi Allan, very good visuals here, really enjoyed it. I was traveling down the freeway when it blew, just an incredible feeling as something we'd all been waiting for and wondering about happened. Spectacular sight.

Good job and thanks for sharing,
Gayle
Comment Written by Showboat on 22-Jul-2015

Things Change by lancellot

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Excellent, Lance, and I'm thrilled everyone else agreed. Congratulations on this awesome ode, my friend. Very enjoyable to say the least.

Hugs,
Gayle
Comment Written by Showboat on 17-Jul-2015

Speak of the Devil by Writingfundimension
Chapter 11 of the book Paranormal Adventures

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I loved this book, Bev, and I'm so glad to see it again. I don't remember enough to spoil the read, just enough to know I want more. This is my fave genre to read - wish I could write it but I can't. You, on the other, do a masterful job!

Wonderful chapter,

Hugs
Gayle
Comment Written by Showboat on 17-Jul-2015

You Just Never Know by Ric Myworld

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Hey Ric, short and sweet. Very good ability to draw in the reader in flash format.

Good luck with this,

Hugs,
Gayle
Comment Written by Showboat on 13-Jul-2015


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