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Did You Remember to Vote? by Patty Palmer

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Good rhymed poem in a humorous style about the writing process here with expectations that come with waiting, and waiting, and WAITING for results. Thanks for pointing out we ought to make a bigger effort to vote. I have a tendency to ignore contests in the voting stage unless I sponsored them. Guess we can all do better.
Comment Written by CrystieCookie999 on 19-Feb-2020

Now They Know by LisaMay

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This impressed me, and I was thinking: wow, maybe 7th grade on up. It is clean enough to use in middle school, although of course it would probably mean more to high schoolers. It could be updated with the music choices, although I recognized both songs. There is a lyrical sadness in the lines. Favorite ones for the male: I did not know I knew how to lie.
I did not know I would say goodbye.
For the girl I like: I did not know I could shout at God.
I did not know I was a lightning rod.
First love often has that emphasis on what "I" want, so that seems true to life. And first love seems to often break up with hurt feelings. A script like this would have made high school assemblies more interesting. Not sure what to fix, since I lean toward comedies instead of drama.

Comment Written by CrystieCookie999 on 19-Feb-2020

An Elmer's Kind of Love by pome lover

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Cute, short poem that brings the essence of love in with a metaphor of glue. If only glue could hold love, and love could be squeezed out as needed. Nice rhyme scheme. Congrats on win.
Comment Written by CrystieCookie999 on 19-Feb-2020

A simple picture by Sandra du Plessis
Chapter 240 of the book Little Good Morning Quotes

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The older I get, the more I like the word 'simple.' I catch some short 'i' assonance in 'simple' and 'picture' in the first line. Then there is some nice 's' or 'z' type consonance in begins, endless, and possibilities. Nice share with a happy pink flower on the small side.
Comment Written by CrystieCookie999 on 19-Feb-2020

A new dawn is here by Sandra du Plessis
Chapter 239 of the book Little Good Morning Quotes

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I hear some very natural-sounding long 'e' assonance in 'peaceful scene' in the second line of this 5-7-5. I agree with line 3, that nature has charm!
Comment Written by CrystieCookie999 on 18-Feb-2020

A Little 'Granny' Magic by robyn corum

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Roast and lima beans brings back memories of my grandma's cooking, too. Even the macaroni and cheese! I guess instead of okra, which reveals to the reader that this must likely be a Southern state, we would have had broccoli and cauliflower, more often than not. Also, instead of black-eyed peas, it would be just ordinary green peas. Nice share, nice meter and rhyme.
Comment Written by CrystieCookie999 on 18-Feb-2020

Muriel's Vacation, Part 2 by LisaMay

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That Muriel is going to drive the travel agent to drink, it sounds like. Just proves that even with snow on the roof, there's still a fire in the furnace. Favorite lines with puns: Wales and Ireland: One lot are weeping and wailing and the other lot are angry. That Brexit business is really getting to them. I want to go someplace where they're happy.
It sounds like Muriel is just a little bit preoccupied with underwear.
Comment Written by CrystieCookie999 on 18-Feb-2020

Smell the Sweetest Roses by patcelaw

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Concise and reverent styled poem here uses roses as an implied metaphor, that the 'sweetest roses' are really the Lord's blessings. There is some 's' alliteration in the line about roses, number 4, with 'smell' and 'sweetest.' Nice share.
Comment Written by CrystieCookie999 on 17-Feb-2020

Illuminate The Wisdom by easyeverett

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I particularly like your last stanza here in this rhymed format, that the saying in the Bible that the poor are always 'with us' or that is to say, in the same area where we live, cannot be taken to mean that each generation has the right to ignore them since nothing changes. The poem seems to suggest that antipathy toward others and autocratic rule are responsible for most of the chaos leading to or continuing poverty. There could be other factors of course. This poem points out that poverty really is a form of chaos, though, which seems out of order compared to God's kingdom.
Comment Written by CrystieCookie999 on 17-Feb-2020

Georgie won't be home tonight.. by royowen

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There is a poetic device of a refrain or repeating two rhymed lines in each stanza. That seems to soften the subject of this poem, that of loss of a loved woman. I really like your first two lines. The last line helps console those who are hurting. I also think the idea that God will right the wrong of what feels like an early loss, too. Comforting post.
Comment Written by CrystieCookie999 on 17-Feb-2020


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