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Shaun Hess
haiku(glassed ponds) by nassus1957

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Interesting poem. The only thing is that fan story wants like a minimum of two lines of review and I never can think of what to say about haikus. They are simple, and so are their responses :)
Comment Written by Shaun Hess on 02-Apr-2014
Hide Me in Your Love by Irikidzai Mkushi

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I'd rejoice in it all and ask you "for more"
The "a" by unending and love doesn't need to be there- it flows better without it. And drop the d on and on the same line to making it "an unending love" (beautiful btw) also add "all" with treasure so that it is "all its treasures"

I think you deserve six for this one- you definitely put a lot of hard work into it and I can see the many devices used. Good write :)
Comment Written by Shaun Hess on 02-Apr-2014
Lonely Voices from Stone by Glasstruth

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Yet, fearful of
The End (I like the capitalized letters)
as humans see
only a linear future, (very true- I don't doubt the possible cataclysmic event)
when opinions as facts are
ugly weeds. (I'm not really sure if I'm interpreting this part right? Enlighten me please :)

Great poem- this was my favourite verse :)
Comment Written by Shaun Hess on 02-Apr-2014
To God Be The Glory by Righteous Riter

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With His love I can be faithful
I'll never lose to lust
Never putting faith in people
In God I'll always trust

That's definitely the best part for me. I wish I could be such a strong adherent to Jesus, it's definitely not easy to begin that walk, but once you get going you realize how appealing it would be to run. I just need to begin walking a little faster I guess lol great write :)
Comment Written by Shaun Hess on 02-Apr-2014
golden years by rouskin

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Yeah- that's how it pretty much works for some people. Simple people. People with no obligations. Sounds amazing honestly. I could totally live that life. As long as I could still love. Great write :)
Comment Written by Shaun Hess on 02-Apr-2014
They Try to Box Me In by adewpearl

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That's a very ambitious sounding poem! I wish I were that ambitious. You had a very nice structure with the syllables and rhythm of it all. One thing I did notice was that the reader would almost have to always stop after each line to keep the rhythm.- to read a line- then stop- establish the beginning stress of the syllable for the next line- finish line- repeat. Great poem though! :)
Comment Written by Shaun Hess on 02-Apr-2014
A Harlequin's Romance by Dean Kuch

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Nice write! I totally agree with the author's notes. I asked this girl at my school today who she writes poetry for (I knew what she was going to say), and she told me for no one; for herself. Exactly! Anyway lol good write :)
Comment Written by Shaun Hess on 02-Apr-2014
A Murder Most Fowl by Dean Kuch

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Awesome :) I thought I might suggest just one thing though!i read and got the rhythm really well, and then I came upon this "no use even trying" - if you turn it into "no use IN even trying", then it (in my opinion) flows better. I noticed it wouldn't break any rules either seeing that you were using 7 syllables in some parts of the second half of the lines. I'm glad I could make a suggestion :) and I really enjoyed the read- I actually nearly reared up after the first and second stanzas- you mention the "scorned lover" and how the character was going to jump; dying in a serene setting- really great part of the poem. Great write again :)
Comment Written by Shaun Hess on 30-Mar-2014
What is love? by Bryana

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Yes, love is an amazing thing. Some people don't know what to do though when someone falls in love with them. That's the worst feeling; unreciprocated love. Nice write :)
Comment Written by Shaun Hess on 30-Mar-2014
My Doom by Eternal Muse
Chapter 10 of the book The Sonnet Collection

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Very very beautiful! I know how hard it is to love someone and not share that with them. It's the most amazing feeling, but it means almost nothing if unreciprocated. It is a damning thing... Beautiful poem- thank you
Comment Written by Shaun Hess on 29-Mar-2014
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