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Katherine shares a glimpse of her previous life.
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DOCTREX SPINS A YARN by Jay Squires
Chapter 9 of the book The Trining

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Interesting lots of details. Not all moved the story forward, it detracted verse adding to a flowing story. Where it was it was interesting to know where everyone sat, I really only needed to know it if some event was about to occur that required action/movement. Instead I was left wondering why all the detail on who sat were if it was simply to listen to a story..a simple across sat x,y an next to me was z. I being a avid reader always seek foreshadowing in the details. Hints of what may be next, inferences to the next plot twist.To many "red herrings" leads me to put the book down. The story premise is strong, consider your reader when you write. We are looking for details that the story yes, but the plot as well. katz
Comment Written by Katzintx on 06-May-2014

CHAPTER TWENTY; PART TWO by barbara.wilkey
Chapter 93 of the book Savannah Love

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New reader. If I was in a book store, flipped open to this section of the book and read, I would most likely buy the book to see what would happen next. Interesting and worth investigating .katz
Comment Written by Katzintx on 05-May-2014

Purity by livelylinda

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Your poem shows structure and flow. It expresses the joy of the moment while making subtle inference of the musical poetry that inspired it own creation. Well done.
Comment Written by Katzintx on 05-May-2014

When I Was Young by adewpearl

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I don't see a formal structure mentioned, but it has a very strong feel of organization and form. You word choice evokes
emotion and connects the reader to the theme.
Well done! One lucky grandson. katz
Comment Written by Katzintx on 05-May-2014

Tanka (Blue screens everywhere) by rouskin

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A favorite form the tanka, you held to it structure well. You topic is clever and word choice reflect a theme that can connect on a worldly level. Nice work. Good luck in your contest. katz
Comment Written by Katzintx on 05-May-2014

Echoes from the Past by tfawcus

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What a great way to honor and a clever way to write. I enjoy your subtle use and the inferences within each level.
Nice work. Your six is for using such wonderful inspirational poets!
Comment Written by Katzintx on 05-May-2014

Of Legends & Lore by MoonWillow
Chapter 12 of the book Poetry Favorites

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You demonstrate adherence to the structure of the nonet form.
Your word choice reflects a mood of thought toward wolves. Nicely done.
Comment Written by Katzintx on 05-May-2014

Why the sonnet? by tfawcus

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The tightly woven rhyme scheme, abba, abba, and cdcdcd represent the structure of a sonnet well. Your counter argument within the final 6 lines, is clever and does bring a smile with the purple prose, no hope. Nice work.
congrats on all time best.
katz
Comment Written by Katzintx on 05-May-2014

Half-Life by Marillion

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You continue to make me laugh as you find the most unusual topic for your work. Washing dishes really and no dishwasher....
Katz
Comment Written by Katzintx on 01-Apr-2014

My House XXVI by Righteous Riter

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The ending is as filled with emotional impact as each chapter has been, nice structure, word choice matches the established rhythm and pattern . Thanks for sharing the journey
Comment Written by Katzintx on 01-Apr-2014


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