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The snowman by trimple

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I think the highest praise you can give a poem is that it was an entertaining read. This is precisely what you've done here. I especially liked your phrases of "secondhand snowman," and "shovelcrusted moon."
Comment Written by Clockwise on 04-Nov-2020

Rare and Beautiful by MissMerri

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Thoughtful, descriptive, and beautifully presented.

I knew I was in for a treat with these opening lines:

"What is it that makes a man outstanding?
I wonder if it can be told in only words,
but I will try"

Thank you!
Comment Written by Clockwise on 07-Aug-2020

Faith by kiwisteveh

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This is one of the most appealing poems I've read here in quite awhile. The rhymes are flawless; nothing feels forced. The rhythm is smoot and natural. There are no awkward tangents; the idea driving this work is very well-focused. Also, you don't seem to feel the annoying need to turn poetry into an exercise to show off your skills with a thesaurus. Most importantly, its an entertaining read (a quality too often overlooked by many would-be poets).

I wish I would have written it, and should serve as a model to strive for.

Very well done, the time you put into this shows.
Comment Written by Clockwise on 03-Aug-2020

Sorry Love by roof35

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Honorable mention? Hogwash! This was clearly the best and should have won. Although I have nothing to do with the 'judging committee,' I would like to apologize to you on their behalf. Hopefully, someday, they will actually start reading the poems they are judging.
Comment Written by Clockwise on 29-Jul-2020

What know ye by Suzanna Ray

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I'm not a fan of using words like 'ye' or 'thou' or 'thee,' (unless you are trying to force rhyme, then by all means, rhyme away) And here, I think 'you' would have worked just fine.

The message here against arrogance is an important one. Arrogance is all around, whether it be in claiming to know the mind of God, or our fellow man. It is the pride that cometh before the fall, and the fall that gets repeated again and again until we start questioning what we know and how we know it.
Comment Written by Clockwise on 19-Jul-2020

By His Hands by Suzanna Ray

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This one speaks to me. While I'm not as far along the path, I have had previews of it. My diabetes has affected both my eyes and my feet. So, when you write about a 'shrouded' path that one must 'blindly tread,' I get it. When you write of it being 'rutted,' I appreciate the danger. Not every reader will pick up on these. Five years ago, I wouldn't have. God Bless.
Comment Written by Clockwise on 19-Jul-2020

One Of Many by Suzanna Ray

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I appreciate how you've taken seemingly mundane things, tunnels, and expounded upon their purpose throughout history--good, band, and indifferent. I especially like the reference to super-colliders. There have been many innovations that have made the world a 'smaller' place. Tunnels are definitely one of these, and also one I wouldn't have thought of. Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written by Clockwise on 19-Jul-2020

Beauty of her Face by Marjon van Bruggen

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The words are gorgeous, but they are not yours.

The two or three very minor changes between this and the translation I found online don't really justify your claim to have "worked it over once more with my own impressions."

My understanding of the point of this site is to support and encourage the writing of original works. I think this post misses that point.

Sorry. :(
Comment Written by Clockwise on 11-Jul-2020

Streets by 24chas

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I almost never read anything on this site, and when I do, I almost always hate it. I sure as hell don't give reviews because giving anything less than four stars is frowned upon, and anything more than that is usually dishonest, and I include my own work on this point.  But as fate would have it, I read your contribution here, and I am glad I did. I can honestly say this is the best poem I have ever seen here. This deserves six stars all day long. In fact, everyone giving it less than six stars is a garbage human being that doesn't deserve to read your writing.  Every five star reviewer owes you an apology. I suggest that until you get that apology, you block every single one of these slanderers. Let them all choke on their meaningless little short form poems until then. Truly amazing! Remember, never give away what you can sell.

In my humble opinion.
Comment Written by Clockwise on 03-Feb-2019

Woman of Gold by Meia (MESAYERS)

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Amazing. I much prefer the first part over the middle and end. The repetition really works! Butter, music, water, clay, I could read this poem each day. Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written by Clockwise on 28-Apr-2018


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